Even Granite Erodes (Iambe's Stone)

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Cpat Hair

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0 posted 2003-09-25 09:29 AM

It lay at the end of Clark’s road
A tiny square in the expanse of grass
That held the stones of a few families
And was kept mowed by old man Johns
In large part because his mother was there
As was marked on the limestone square
That held her name and the dates
Of her stay on earth.

I knew where it was
And how to get there
Cause Iambe had taken me there
And laid flowers on a stone
That had long ago lost any letters
To the rain and snow.

“Someone should care.”
She had explained.

“I found it one day I was feeling bad,
and figured like whomever was in the grave
maybe I’d never have anyone to remember me
when my time comes.”

So, every so often she would gather up
Some wild flowers and take them out there
Place them on the stone and clean up around it.

I knew where it was

The fresh turned earth stood out
Against the late autumn green
Spurred to a final rebirth by late season rains
And warm days.

I placed my handful of flowers
And left a note
Pinned down with a rough edged stone
That came from someplace deeper
And had been turned up
As other things were buried

“I remember.”
Written on plain lined paper
That would fade

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (09-25-2003 09:51 AM).]

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-09-25 09:31 AM

“Someone should care.”

~*~

Yes.

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

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2 posted 2003-09-25 10:14 AM

Damn...I wasn't prepared...

I will miss the overall's and scary smooth..

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

3 posted 2003-09-25 10:21 AM

"that would fade....."

Damn you!

Too nice m'friend....Too, too nice!

Ed

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-09-25 11:01 AM

Okay..I don't dare blink for the tears spilling over..
and I have this big ole lump in my throat..

Yes, 'someone should care'.

Excellent write sir.

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Bonnie j
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since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

5 posted 2003-09-25 11:39 AM

You are reaching deep down into our souls with this one.Touching each one of us with your sad and beautiful words of poetry.
Love Bon-Bon

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

6 posted 2003-09-25 11:56 AM

This means alot to me. Thank you.

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2003-09-25 11:56 AM

a very beautiful write, hiya and good day to ya cap, how are you doing today?

KristieSue

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since 2003-01-31

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8 posted 2003-09-25 12:54 PM

*smiling* This is wonderful!

"Vision without action is a daydream. Action without vision is a nightmare." -Japanese Proverb
~ KS

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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9 posted 2003-09-25 05:02 PM

(big hugggssssss) And as the rain patters down on the pale white parchment, it can be read in invisible ink..."...and I believe you still do too!" (sad sigh) This is powerfully gripping, sweet friend, the memory is but always a still-frame, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

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10 posted 2003-09-25 05:31 PM

Ya had to do this today? I'm going back to my hole in the ground. Don't knock, I won't answer.

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

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right...there

11 posted 2003-09-25 05:51 PM

Double meaning to "I remember"...great as always, Ron..

believe in what your heart feels...

LiquidMidnight
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since 2003-09-24

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12 posted 2003-09-25 07:18 PM

I really liked the form of this piece. Even though some parts were free, other's had a bit of structure. (don't know if that was intended) Not only does it take skill to write, but requires some poetic skill on the reader's part. Something I really think is cool. (I think that good art has to challenge, to a degree, the person interpreting it)

Patricia
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since 2003-04-06

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Missouri

13 posted 2003-09-25 07:35 PM

Yes, you do reach me. I find something personal in your words.

Patricia

serenity blaze
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14 posted 2003-09-25 08:01 PM

What you have done with this Iambe series is nothing short of amazing. And that fact that so many DO care is a testimony to your writing ability.

My hat is off to you Cap.

And I wait for the next spin...

Janet Marie
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15 posted 2003-09-26 01:06 AM

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When I read the first one...I had a moth feeling...but you wrote it so subtle that I held out hope in the vague references..and I could tell by most of the replies no one else quite realized either, then this one came up......

I have to tell ya...part of me wants to ignore this..as if not replying could make it go away.

As I told you before...I understand the need to lay a muse to rest and I know you like things wrapped up neat...no loose ends....
but I will be honest, I am surprised at the way you did this...vague, no details, with little or no emotional fanfare...
you always wrote of her with so much intensity and chemistry and I guess I thought (or maybe hoped) if you ever made it this final that it would be with the same energy...but I guess that just goes to prove it was past time for you to lay the muse to rest.

Sen said it best...your wrote her so well that we all craved her...and just look at the spin offs from this series... look how many of us were inspired by your Iambe stories, creating a family and supporting cast.

Well, its your muse..you can lay her quietly to rest and we will respect that..but you had to know I wasnt gonna be so quiet.

And ya also know Im gonna nag ya till you find a new muse to amuse the moth LOL

And so my point in all this moth ranting?
I just wanted to say thank you for all the times this series inspired me to write of Jake, and other poems as well.

"Iambe" ...youre one hell of muse.
Ron..youre one hell of a poet.

"If you feel heartbreak, distant thunder, lightning, earthquakes ...
If you wonder why the earth moves ... this is me missing you."

JH

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (09-26-2003 01:15 AM).]

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19

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16 posted 2003-09-26 01:14 AM

You are touching deep down int he soul

No one does it like you.
Crystal

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

17 posted 2003-09-27 03:30 AM

Lambe inspires so much...stands to reason that she would, since she's become a part of us. The continuing series is like a fifth dimension....who would have ever thought!

Ya know I love your writing...doncha?
Cpat~ Ron

KristieSue

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18 posted 2003-09-27 10:58 AM

this is like one of those books you start reading...and by the end you're praying that the book is neverending. You find yourself going back to read it again and again.

Love this...hate it (that it's ending)...but love it :-p

"Vision without action is a daydream. Action without vision is a nightmare." -Japanese Proverb
~ KS

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