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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
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0 posted 2003-11-12 06:22 PM

                  Ice Age

I know where
  the ice is.
   A parching wind
    flows down from
     the blue-white face,
      desiccates the trees;

        boulders crack
         under the threat of it.

           It's coming,
            the cryosphere
              stampeding motionless,
               indomitable

                  and what have I
                   to fight it?
This axe. A little fire.

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (11-12-2003 09:59 PM).]

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-11-12 06:25 PM

I really enjoyed this read. Full of true history.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2003-11-12 06:54 PM

Ed~
What a stupendous write~
I felt the chill, the anticipation and the helplessness~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2003-11-13 12:04 PM

Marge is right... this leaves chills... but mine are those that come from an excellent read, not wind across ice. *S* You make us feel the steady encroachment... and hear the unspoken plea that such limited weapons will somehow be adequate for survival against such an unstoppable force. I wanna write like this! LOL

WildPoet
Member

since 2003-11-10

Posts 205
California

4 posted 2003-11-13 02:54 AM

I feel the devastation, the isolation and the Glacier's encroachment!
Very strong!

WildPoet

Enigma
Junior Member

since 2003-11-13

Posts 11
kadena, Japan

5 posted 2003-11-13 03:05 AM

I liked the poem, but I dont get it the style is OK, but it's everyones style. I think the best writers are the ones who can mix MINE and UR'S. Thats my goal, but until then I will B in the lab.

Only God Can Judge Me

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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6 posted 2003-11-13 03:25 AM

that's it Ed...you said it well

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
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7 posted 2003-11-13 09:57 AM

Yer right, Enigma....my style is pretty bland, and I ought to work on adding more variety and spontaneity to the way I write. Thanks for being straight with me, and I hope you won't stop reading me just because of one poem that's less than the best I can do.

Back to the weight room!

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