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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Comes 3 AM And eyes used to prying themselves Two time zones removed from slumber To the fractured half lit views Of watery iris Not yet able to focus Practice the art of deception By making believe they cannot change As easily as clocks in an adjustment Of travel. 3AM is an in between Those in the restaurant are stoned Or last ditch desperate to find solace From a night of paid pleasure Or too little sleep The machines never stop Infernal chime hammers away at silence Refusing the ear reprieve But chasing thoughts away So that come 3:30 You can’t hear the voices Inside Whispering And 4:30 doesn’t cry it tears It just hums from too much booze Too little sleep And wheels… That turn on themselves Trying to line up in kind And as if magic Provide the illusion It’s all fun The unlucky ones Sit in the side booths Head in hands as sleep tries to salve The wounds of struck out Got rolled What did I do? Towards the back Are the girls Eating steak and eggs To wash the taste of the last job Out of their mouth and to do a head count Of is anyone lost Miscounted some discount the lies And hard glazed fractures craze eyes Once thought pretty “coffee” Is all I can order The rest turned my appetite inward And this napkin has to do As words spill ugly On white Come 3:30 On this Lost Vegas Night |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
3AM is an in between ------------ So that come 3:30 You can’t hear the voices Inside Whispering And 4:30 doesn’t cry it tears It just hums from too much booze Too little sleep And wheels… That turn on themselves Trying to line up in kind And as if magic Provide the illusion --------------------- Towards the back Are the girls Eating steak and eggs To wash the taste of the last job Out of their mouth and to do a head count Of is anyone lost Miscounted some discount the lies And hard glazed fractures craze eyes Once thought pretty “coffee” Is all I can order The rest turned my appetite inward And this napkin has to do As words spill ugly On white Come 3:30 On this Lost Vegas Night ================================ oh damn this just .................... thank god for that napkin............. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
JM... the napkin was just a blank spot in my head to carry the image..lol.. the coffee and my eyes did the rest.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She believes that life is made up of all that you're used to And the clock on the wall has been stuck at three for days and days And she says baby ... It's 3am I must be lonely When she says baby Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes Says the rain's gonna wash away I believe it mb20 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
when I went through Vegas it was daylight, 1970 laws were still enforced then and the doors to dark places where musical chimes clanged their beckoning noises and I held back, aware, unwary, too young to know another's pain at the crack of a card or in the crease of sullen eyes ~*~ Wow...what memories you brought back of the brief moment I drove through Vegas, and stopped for a cold drink....Pepsi, that was.... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
3 am is the best time to see humans true nature... Next time how about an alliteration? I know how you love them... "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
nicely penned... you write with such ease... feels absolutely great to read you regards sudhir |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you mean people are actually up at that hour??? YIKES....LOL what am I saying I never sleep.....Neat write....wonderful from you as always Lauren~ i carry your heart with me |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
damn...vivid Do songs on the radio sing to all the fools in love? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) This too felt like it was inspired by matchbox twenty's "3 A.M" somehow to me too! (big hugggssssssss) I am up at that hour more than one may think, God Bless You, and... "maybe, maybe, maybe, you may find something that will keep you, but if the bright lights don't receive you, you should turn yourself around and come on home..."  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Zyell Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 121USA |
I feel, I smell it, I see it, I'm there.....excellent visions. ~Z |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you always have a way of taking us with you |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"3AM is an in between Those in the restaurant are stoned Or last ditch desperate to find solace From a night of paid pleasure Or too little sleep The machines never stop Infernal chime hammers away at silence Refusing the ear reprieve But chasing thoughts away So that come 3:30 You can’t hear the voices Inside Whispering" Painted this darkly in spite of all the lights. I'm impressed, but then I'm always impressed with the clearness of your images in my head...  |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Solid! Nicely done, sir. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is a dark one - probably the darkest I've read of your work. Corinne |
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Lady Of Light Junior Member
since 2003-10-23
Posts 31 |
Excellent visualizations in this write. Thank you.  |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I've never been in a casino at 3AM. But your words have taken me there, Ron. Excellent!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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