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icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

0 posted 2003-11-06 05:44 PM

It rains again tonight
and I'm ready to go home.
In a message
on my phone you said,
"I just called
to see if you were dead."
Even coming from you
that seems a strange thing to say.
I hit delete,
but couldn't stop the thought
that wandered through my head...
Where are you in the world today,
and is that really what you want?
I'll be gone soon enough,
then who will you haunt?
You are like a promised rose
that almost bloomed,
but chose stubbornly instead
to grow more thorns.
Which one of us is really doomed?

©2003 by icebox

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2003-11-06 05:55 PM

which one of us is doomed?

bud.. we all are, but you know that...

I enjoyed the read...

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

2 posted 2003-11-06 05:56 PM

I ditto the Cpat....good read...great write....I know "doom"

KristieSue

Senior Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

3 posted 2003-11-06 06:02 PM

dang, I've received a phone call like that. My mother. Hopefully it's not me.

Good write

Do songs on the radio sing to all the fools in love?

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

4 posted 2003-11-06 06:06 PM

This was very good.
Crystal

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2003-11-06 06:13 PM

icebox...I do wish you could get another number. In my flower shop that kind of rose is not used....the thorns are too sharp to remove. Hugs!

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

6 posted 2003-11-06 08:33 PM

What a growler that had to be....tell ya what, if I had her email address I'd send her a link, so she could read both the poem and what us folks who actually like you have to say about it.

Of course then she'd prolly haunt you here....maybe not such a good idea....

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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 2003-11-06 08:51 PM

Enjoyed very much icebox.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

8 posted 2003-11-06 10:05 PM

Thank you all for your kind words. I appreciate you all.

As for this person, well, I learned a valuable lesson back then(perhaps more than one); I learned it is better to suffer a problem person than to be one.

*smile*

Thanks again for reading poetry and for taking time to comment.

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

9 posted 2003-11-06 10:47 PM

...better and EASIER to suffer the problem person than to be one. Your dignity is intact, sir....~K~

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

10 posted 2003-11-06 11:03 PM

a promised rose
that almost bloomed,
but chose stubbornly instead
to grow more thorns.

only you could say FFFFF.UUUUU so poetically..grins luvin this

Marge Tindal