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Nothing I Become.
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Nothing I Become. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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In this word, is nothing and nothing it will tread. In this sacrifice, lies no evidence of sin, yet still there is a heart that sputters whispers, echoing from within. Be still, gardens grow deep rooted in my palms, so I may lay flowers on every grave.. Every dying hope that I've now mis-placed. Murmuring ghost of my haunted dreams, at dusk I welcome the word that is nothing. So cries the birds with no color, in the pallid sky they weep, nipping at the vines that grow along frozen windows that in loneliness they grow souls darkened. With this benumbed embrace, I am locked in a place I need not be freed, so whole, these empty pains that increase, below this heart stained with reason, and guilt. So comes and goes the caress, like winter unrelenting.. to the end.. In this word is nothing, in these flows of mad wind, there is no song.. and nothing I become |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I could not have described it near as well |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very intensly written...but...I disagree...you have become much more then your want to realize...and a voice speaks through you, me, us....we can accept it, or ignore it...but baby, you are extremely signficant...and every single word, means much more then just something. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"In this sacrifice, lies no evidence of sin, yet still there is a heart that sputters whispers, echoing from within." It is so hard to pick out favorite lines from what you write...as I tend to love them all... I literally read through the first time fast, because I want to swallow it whole..then I go back and savor each line, taking in its meaning... "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Fantastic writing! Eric |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow! I couldn't begin to pick a favorite line, this is so completely excellent  |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
NIce write. THis is the line that I liked the best,"Be still, gardens grow deep rooted in my palms, so I may lay flowers on every grave.." GIS All that is great once was small. |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
yep , no hope there, but your writing has |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
meg your writing blows me away...h |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
damn megglies..again you show why you are one of the best and brightest |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Kaoru....my fav lines..... Be still, gardens grow deep rooted in my palms, so I may lay flowers on every grave.. Absolutely wonderful! Maree fate is not just |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Draining the color from the sky. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Meg . . . So comes and goes the caress, like winter unrelenting.. and she comes . . . xxoo |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I think that the reason why I really enjoyed this is that I can relate to these words, as they are hauntingly familiar to not only my own (in meaning), but to the lyrics of a song that happens to be one of my favorites. Enjoyed! "If this grand panorama before me is what you call God...then God is not dead." |
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