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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Something you whispered in your words fragile-- tough to hear of earth broken once rare gifts now burnt ash here I fell in yesterdays dust slipping silently across night I, who have seen your eyes sleep -- endless moments in crimson light I probe dreams with black fingers; searching for time in half finished walls, for more peace -- I inhale stone by stone, grain by grain-- we spoke of memories-- your abuse affected my smile How many Octobers left me? meeting my shadow? My muse reminded me fragrances in bottles, was lavender floating like feathers from the sky {I studied once, the instructions, they seem distant now-- from all I remember -- to far from here} shades returned to dance in darkness that all this blue goes with out pain staining glass i carry your heart with me i am never without it you are what a moon has always meant sky of sky the wonder that keeps stars apart- e.e.cummings [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (11-03-2003 08:23 PM).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Lauren, this is so moving, and damn, very touching... "I probe dreams with black fingers; searching for time in half finished walls, for more peace -- I inhale stone by stone, grain by grain-- we spoke of memories-- your abuse affected my smile" I think this part touched me the most, but all of it, is amazing  I am keeping this one |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Lauren: your abuse affected my smile oh yes . . . sadly I love your picture . . . adore black and white and this? rare gifts indeed . . . I sometimes think of them and leave them with a smile only because I must beautiful writing xxoo |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
My oh my Lauren..YOU my dear are a rare gift! And we..we are the fortunate recipients of your tender words... This is wonderful!! AND!! Your pic is spectacular!! ~Smiles, hugs & luv~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I failed miserably when I tried to pick a favorite passage... for the whole is so excellent. *S* |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
beautifully sad |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
rare gifts now burnt ash here I fell in yesterdays dust slipping silently across night I, who have seen your eyes sleep -- endless moments in crimson light I probe dreams with black fingers; searching for time in half finished walls, for more peace -- I inhale stone by stone, grain by grain-- we spoke of memories-- your abuse affected my smile How many Octobers left me? meeting my shadow? My muse reminded me fragrances in bottles, was lavender floating like feathers from the sky ===================================== you will already just know how this touches me in places deep..... (thank you) Rare gifts? ... yes...your exquisite poetry is indeed.   Words break into splinters on the pages I write |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Odd, but not so odd, I highlighted the same single line that Susie did. Another good write Lauren Ed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderfully done! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"here I fell in yesterdays dust slipping silently across night" Loved those lines lady!! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ So tenderly exquisite~ Sitting here enjoying the all of it~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I so enjoy stained glass... never realizing the pain. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
I really really enjoyed this, Lauren... ~Lauren~ lol! sorry, I still get a kick out of that...I guess I'm easily amused?  |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Such a talent, indeed. Again, your words remind me of anothers'... Beauty, brains, & talent... (and in the spirit of Halloween & Harvest)... what a deadly combination!  Enjoyed! "If this grand panorama before me is what you call God...then God is not dead." |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Oh Lauren, this sounds so sad, sweet friend, I sure hope this abuse isn't of your own, as you are a wonderful person and no one should ever be abused like this! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A rare gift indeed... wonderfully penned Lauren. Maree fate is not just whose cooking smells good but which way the wind blows (Ani DiFranco) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (11-04-2003 05:22 PM).] |
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