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Open Poetry #29

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Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

0 posted 2003-11-02 07:43 PM

Distant acutely past the silvery shadows,
an untresspassed soul awaits you.

A tranquil walk,
harbored by beauty.
Bearing but love.

Entangled fingers dance,
in a moonlit meadow.

A harmonious moment,
hidden by the soft flow of water.
provoking innocent love.

Distant acutely past the silvery shadows,
an untresspassed soul awaits you.

Love,
xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx
*My poetry website
http://www.freewebs.com/poettree/

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2003-11-02 08:38 PM

Kellie..:-)
The opening stanza is very poetic, it flows very well, you have choosen words with near perfect stresses..and I think your repeating of it at the end is a good choice.

> The content is a bit mysterious. I like that, now I can use my imagination to conjur its reality. I am taking a Fruedian guess..Is this about the loss of virginity? That, and a statement that it does not really matter, because your soul has been untresspassed on?
"an untresspassed soul awaits you"

Anyway, I enjoyed the poem, hope to see more of yours here....:-)

>>>>ice/ford<<<<

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