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rambling_words
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London, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-11-02 06:08 PM


The well of my emotions is empty
I have reached the bottom
there is no further that I can go
I cry for no apparent reason
then I stare off in the distance to another season
where oceans swim with pearls across a liquid canvas
washing away on a solid wooden platform waiting for a train
destinations are only places of faces
reflecting in the past of our lives
buildings that represent home
when nothing could be further from the truth
my home is inside your heart
the vast mind of a soul bleeding for the unknown
crimson skies dying in a form of treason
I now know the reason
why I cry for the changing season.

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2003-11-02 06:14 PM


when you think you've reached the bottom,
hold your breath,
close your eyes,
open your heart and mind,
and dive deeper

thank you, for a pondering write

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2003-11-02 06:49 PM


Wonderful write John...
You are quickly becoming a 'must read'.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2003-11-03 03:46 AM


sounds like the winter blues

I got 'em too

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2003-11-03 10:00 AM


The well of my emotions is empty
I have reached the bottom
there is no further that I can go
I cry for no apparent reason
then I stare off in the distance to another season
where oceans swim with pearls across a liquid canvas
===================================

my home is inside your heart
the vast mind of a soul bleeding for the unknown
crimson skies dying in a form of treason
I now know the reason
why I cry for the changing season.
==================================

this is written across my heart...
stunning mix of imagery and expression.
You and I write somewhat the same...mixing free verse and rhyme.
Very well done poet sir..I am enjoying getting to know your poetry.

Words break into splinters on the pages I write
If I lost you I don't know what I'd do ...
Burn forever where the flame turns blue

David Gray

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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5 posted 2003-11-03 10:23 AM


This was truly outstanding!  

I am going to find others..

Susan

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

kayjay
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Oregon
6 posted 2003-11-03 10:39 AM


Nicely done.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~
7 posted 2003-11-03 10:48 AM


I feel a kindred spirit in reading this. It's as if you read my thoughts. WOW. I hope you won't mind that I save this. Thank you so much for sharing this. Godspeed in all you do.
Love,
Terri~

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
8 posted 2003-11-03 10:53 AM


rambling.
Good rambling, enjoyed.

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