Open Poetry #29 |
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Like the Vast Tides |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279![]() |
Like the Vast Tides Thou art as lithe as waves upon the brine, Twice as comely as a sweet summer rose, Mine heart oft disbelieves thy love is mine, When there were others that you might have chose. The Heavens it appears have twice blessed me, For I have my health and I have your love, Yea my being knows not heartaches debris, And I've ne'er swum where ardor's undreamt of. Like the vast tides my love rises for thee, Crashing heavenward like storm-tossed breakers, 'Tis but a display of my joyous glee, Drawn upon a million sodden acres. If the Sea of Love were a factual place, I'd swim its cool waters for thy embrace. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful...small blessings are often the ones we take for granted, often the ones we forget about, but not you...this is a great reminder for me what I have been blessed with, though not love, other things. ![]() |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (smiles) It can always be a true place...if you look deep in your heart and she can believe you, where true love can never disappear! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is gentle and beautiful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kevin, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth I can see the sun set and I perceive ***Live*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-01-2003 01:28 PM).] |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
A very good message, backed up by a strong arsenal of words and images... Sent ya an email... |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Thank-you everyone who took the time to read this. I know my poetry needs a bit of work here and I appreciate every hint I get in that direction. Sometimes I need help understanding the fancy rules of poetry though. Can someone explain to me how to tell where the accents are please? This is where one of my greatest weaknesses lie. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Shakespeare only 3 words can I say about your poem. I Love It!!!!!! :-) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Kevin, poetry here is how you write it...that's all. I don't go by fancy rules. I write what's in my heart, my mind, and what comes off the tongue. People sometimes say I write like I'm talking. So I guess I speak in poetry. ![]() You don't need work...just write. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Wow...what is accent? Why would you need it? I was moved and I didn't know rules. It spoke to me of love, and cherishing another, and thanking the God up above for the good fortune you have been bestowed with. Maybe rules, and particulars aren't the way to go always. I don't know the mechanics of poetry I just know I was much moved by these words and taken away to another time in history which is, for some reason unknown to me, is my favorite time, and the language that was spoken most elegant. Beautiful this was!!!! Thank you for sharing...whatever it's error..it was still beautiful to me. Love, Terri~ ![]() |
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MorninGlory Member
since 2003-08-30
Posts 175Oklahoma |
This was such a tender write and so full of love and affection for someone that is obviously very special. I read your comment, were you looking for some specifics about sonnets? I have sometimes used the following site to help me, it explains some of the particulars about the different forms. But there are also many out here that are experts, so maybe they will chime in too! But your writing is always so delightful, its very difficult to even notice any errors in form! Well done, poet.. http://www.uni.edu/~gotera/CraftOfPoetry/ |
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