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Without, Within ...............brian, Serenity duet
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Without, Within ...............brian, Serenity duet |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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at first faithfull gleam dancing in a glance of eye dreaming I hear her life spin naked now revealed without, within reach to taste her pout the skies on first suckling shout Glory! rejoice her scent the more my knees unbuckling to pour trembling the atoms that are her name patterns are the lame against the soldiers laying bold hearts on the field... gold engraved irrigation of the land found within burgundies obscene a sound in jest wrinkle up the nose protest: a sight to splice the visions tight our rest shadowed by the mist by contamination's grist grinding of the crop strop the razor dulled by the memory of birth and blood was let in love within tiny drop --- a pearl in libation our world |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The first and last lines are the clincher ...for me! Perfectly~ You did really good you two, like anyone had any doubts!  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
this is beautiful you guys . .  my knees unbuckling to pour trembling the atoms that are her name and and blood was let in love within tiny drop --- a pearl in libation our world dulled by the memory of birth and here? you join *smile* Good to see this so so good xxoo |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Oh...pure beauty... Absolutely gorgeous...the two of you, AND the poem...smile What a privilege to read... Love you both...  When the power of love overcomes the |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes...nice duet you two make can't wait for more! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
now see, I loved this line...only because I pout so much...  "reach to taste her pout" M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
spingiddygleeeeeeeeeeeeeeee (even the construct depicts that, bri...) you complete me. Thank you baby. Love you. (still a sleepy witch this morn...  ) |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
And so, you have mapped the double helix that becomes you two. (Pick a definition for "becomes"...they all work.) |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
awesome |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, I just love how this "sways", dextrosing in its vibrant form, yay, so much imagery swims throughout this! (big group hug) God Bless You Both, sweet friends, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Brian and Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you both! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Duet again. PLEASE!!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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