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This Land, Our Land
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This Land, Our Land |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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To grasp the arms of one at break of dawn where in the light does give to eyes a gleam. A place of green, of flowers on the lawn beside cold rugged rocks, the swirling stream. For is the green, that brings a murmur’s sigh. A quiver of the heart in nature’s view. Where from the golden bird, in soar does fly, and brings the barren nest a fish’s stew. To clench cold hands and eyes in sudden gasp, and feel the heart now cease the crimson course. Would cleave the earth of painted nature’s grasp, and leave the dark to rend it’s silent force. As time does shape the molded land of earth, so will the babe, now born a waking birth. [This message has been edited by Magnus (11-01-2003 11:33 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
love the cadence of this write, Barry well done! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wow! Inspiring stuff. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice flow...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
To grasp the arms of one at break of dawn where in the light does give to eyes a gleam. A place of green, of flowers on the lawn beside cold rugged rocks, the swirling stream. This is just lovely, Magnus... I like very much! *S* |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I agree with Suthern..just lovely...I know this would be beautiful if read aloud to us by you... imagining M |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I read, I tried to pick a favorite verse and decided it was impossible. Love it Barry, very well done! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I wanted to place a few commas in the last few lines, to set off some of your words. Read it aloud - relish what you say... you'll find where they are needed. Enjoyed this one, Magnus. Thank you! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Well done my friend.  |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
You always write so powerfuly...and this one is no exception. Great Job! Eric |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
I stand andd applaud this, all of it... An excellent poem to read at a slam, Or to anyone with an ear for good poetry... >>>Ice/ford<<< |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ This is as stunning a write as I'll find to read this day~ Absolutely beautiful~ The gentle lilting cadence of the entire piece rolls off the tongue so effortlessly~ SIR ... this is exceptional~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You, each of you...the words...give me chills... For I have never felt capable of writing a piece of poetry that would be appreciated as well as you have led me to believe you do. Thank you very much...and yes, I would read this...might even become slightly overcome by my own emotions of it. Thanx again |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Yay! Yes, it is our land and may we all run amock barefoot and enjoy and celebrate this world that we treasure and respect it! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Damn that is good Barry. You just made the #1 must read poem of the day in my books. Well done my friend. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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