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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-09-24 11:16 AM

Hwy 38 winds among stacked limestone hills
and black Jack, stunted from a third cut mentality
that seems to match the attitudes about change
that exist all along the corridor leading
to the Upper reaches of the Gasconade.

We got stares when we stopped for gas
disapproval and suspicion evident in every
unblinking eye that took us in.

You wore shorts and a checked shirt
unbuttoned three that let the swell of you
tempt my eyes, and cried "Hussy" to right wing
revisionist that would re-write the words
of "God" to fit some comfort level that denied
human touch was pleasure.

I suffered not that week
from fire and brimstone strictures
but was instead filled with embers that lusted
to flame before in an end we were coated
cold
with ash.

It was later,
when I pulled the book from its wrapper
and wrote,
"I found their eyes to be hot
as they explored the length of your leg
and the swell of your chest, but cold,
when it came to meeting the idea you were more
than some passing toy."

I heard you rustle the sheets
and so I closed the pages
on another piece of this passage
and reached for your skin
to fall into the prayer
that was love

"Save me?"
you said.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-09-24 11:20 AM

"I found their eyes to be hot
as they explored the length of your leg
and the swell of your chest, but cold,
when it came to meeting the idea you were more
than some passing toy."

~*~

dogear that page....

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-09-24 11:29 AM

You wore shorts and a checked shirt
unbuttoned three that let the swell of you
tempt my eyes, and cried "Hussy" to right wing
revisionist that would re-write the words
of "God" to fit some comfort level that denied
human touch was pleasure.

I suffered not that week
from fire and brimstone strictures
but was instead filled with embers that lusted
to flame before in an end we were coated
cold
with ash.

Naughty, naughty, Capt. Ron.....

But, it sure does make for reading pleasure. LOL

Hugs

Ethel

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2003-09-24 12:40 PM

Hiya Cap....what a marvelous read, very much enjoyed.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2003-09-24 01:18 PM

"I heard you rustle the sheets
and so I closed the pages
on another piece of this passage
and reached for your skin
to fall into the prayer
that was love"

"Save me?"
you said.

oh..how sexy...a man that writes beautiful words in bed...

Did you save her?

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-09-24 01:30 PM

"I heard you rustle the sheets
and so I closed the pages
on another piece of this passage
and reached for your skin
to fall into the prayer
that was love

"Save me?"
you said."

Damn!
.......just damn.

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2003-09-24 01:57 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooo beautifully sensual, sweet friend, seems every place you rest your head and sit there's always something special coming out on this poetic travelogue, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

7 posted 2003-09-24 02:32 PM

Ah, roads traveled! You always do paint them so well.

Core

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

8 posted 2003-09-24 03:52 PM

Awesome write, dare i say it brought to mind Hunter S. Thompson in the way words flow..a serious Hunter if there is such a thing...i adore both your writing

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

9 posted 2003-09-26 12:17 PM

what they said..

you always make me lost for words damn you! I can never give you the reply i want to...bah...p.s she sounds like a foxy laydeee!

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2003-09-27 11:17 AM

Ron....You title was fabulous for this journey of pages and love. A wonderful read!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

11 posted 2003-09-27 12:18 PM

OK, on a scale of 1-5 I give this a 6!

Not too shabby, Ron. You paint poetry very
well.

n2dmystic
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 253
beyond the doors of perception

12 posted 2003-09-27 12:30 PM

very nice, indeed. my fave -
"and cried "Hussy" to right wing
revisionist that would re-write the words
of "God" to fit some comfort level that denied
human touch was pleasure."
hope to read more of you. Peace, Joe

from the big MT
seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries

LiquidMidnight
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 50

13 posted 2003-09-27 06:13 PM

This was an amazing write.

"You wore shorts and a checked shirt
unbuttoned three that let the swell of you
tempt my eyes, and cried "Hussy" to right wing
revisionist that would re-write the words
of "God" to fit some comfort level that denied
human touch was pleasure."

A very sexually stimulating passage, a political rant, and a moral observation all within the same stanza. Brilliant!!!

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