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Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2003-09-24 10:51 AM

The Thorn

Your dream of love, so humbly born
Of innocence, the bloom is sketched
But petal visions finely etched
Between the heart and mind are torn
And of the rose is left the thorn

You dream of sighs that scent the morn
With fragrances that breathe your breath
And vow until your final death
A faithfulness so duly sworn
But of the rose is left the thorn

His vine with promises adorned
Each promise is a rose of bliss
Each rose bestowed the sweetest kiss
Each kiss disguises only scorn
And of the rose is left the thorn

So dream your dreams before you mourn
Sweet rose, unknowing of the truth
On tangled vines in throws of youth
But let this withered rose forewarn -
Of every rose is left a thorn

No flower on earth escapes the storm
That blows the petals from the bower
With no remorse for any flower
But when his vine is duly shorn
What then remains is but a thorn

Elizabeth Santos

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

1 posted 2003-09-24 10:57 AM

This is an exercise you excel at o' Santos. I truly enjoyed.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2003-09-24 11:01 AM

Liz...it is so easy to ignore the fact of thorns, when there is so much beauty in a rose when it's first born.

Marty Baird
Member

since 2003-09-20

Posts 90
Georgia, U.S.

3 posted 2003-09-24 11:04 AM

I enjoyed your work

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-09-24 11:11 AM

Very insightful, my dear.
No beauty, without pain...

no poem, without tears...

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2003-09-24 11:26 AM

Elizabeth
A rose without a thorn I fear
Has not this life been born my dear.
Evcellent write.

NewEnglandlazurlu
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

6 posted 2003-09-24 12:18 PM

Hi Liz ... what a wonderful poem with a lesson for us. No rainbows without rain, no roses without thorns.

Hope you are well ... huggles, Marti

Insomniac Cat
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since 2003-09-23

Posts 69
The Land of the Dadaists

7 posted 2003-09-24 12:27 PM

Awesome! I really enjoyed this one. The repetition of the last time really grabbed me.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2003-09-24 01:38 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Elizabeth, your poetry always speaks with pure wisdom and love, sweet friend, I too believe this with all my heart, as God would never mean to leave the thorn there just to feel the sting, but simply to offer us wisdom that beauty has tears and love sometimes bleeds but all the same if love is true the rose will always bloom! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, I've missed your lovely poetry soooooo much and am so happy you're back, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shien upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Tim
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

9 posted 2003-09-24 11:34 PM

Always a pleasure to read Lady Santos...

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

10 posted 2003-09-25 01:02 AM

No pain - no gain!
I would suffer that old thorn anytime for time with a rose

Nice reading you m'friend.

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

11 posted 2003-09-25 06:11 AM

Liz...I ALWAYS love reading you. I'm never disappointed.

This is simply beautiful, my friend...as is the rose...

Love and hugs,
~Vicky
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

12 posted 2003-09-25 11:13 AM

What a beautiful piece Liz. Fantastic meter and rhyme scheme flowing throughout, with a lovely repetition to bring the message home. Just beautiful indeed. It's always wonderful to read you, my friend.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

13 posted 2003-09-25 01:43 PM

So dream your dreams before you mourn
Sweet rose, unknowing of the truth
On tangled vines in throws of youth
But let this withered rose forewarn -
Of every rose is left a thorn

What a beauty this is! *S* But some things are worth a bleeding thumb. *S*

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