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Finding Rhythm
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Finding Rhythm |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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Catch my breath on the wind as it passes by whispering your name Cup me in your comfort seal me in your security touch me to taboo Feel my heart beat as it races to the rhythm of your touch Peel me to purity free my fears melt my mediocrity See the soul of who I become with the words that caress your lips take my hand and walk with me towards tomorrow [This message has been edited by Susan Caldwell (10-28-2003 12:41 AM).] |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Loved this |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WOOOOO HOOOOOO .... A hottie poem full of alliterations... the moth is giddy!!!!  Susan this poem makes me holler--IWIHWT!!!!!!! Catch my breath on the wind as it passes by whispering your name oh yeah... love that verse... high inspire and your pens on fire.  very cool write. You're the color of the sky reflected in each store-front window pane ... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I was here and I'll be back.  (Watching the parade) |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Thought I might've dreamed this. But it's still here! Mornin' Myrtle...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Susan, Well done enjoyed. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Koko!  JM~LOL yes the alliterations were intentional..*sigh* Duncan~It's still here baby..now what say you? Sy~Good Morning!  And thank you so very much! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Susan, this is a beautiful write! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh God Susan yes yes yes take my hand and walk with me towards tomorrow what a beautiful sight indeed xxoo |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is absolutely beautiful!!  |
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Castlehigh New Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 7Beautiful isle of Éire |
Susan, This is beautiful. In particular I love the words, "Catch my breath on the wind as it passes by whispering your name" The image is pure. With this image you can walk with comfort and security into your tomorrows. Gives a good feeling, Susan. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And therein the rhythm of a delicate tango... well done, Susan. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Susan, I'd say this poem proves that you have found your rhythm! ~ and this write caught my breath! I loved it! Very well done!!!  The following lines really stick in my mind: "Peel me to purity free my fears melt my mediocrity" ~ and ~ "take my hand and walk with me towards tomorrow" To love eternal,  Linda |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Kacy~Thank you so much! Sue~Thanks! It would be indeed… Sea~Thank you! Castlehigh~Thank you, you and the mothy one picked out my favorite lines Kari~ “the rhythm of a delicate tango” perfect! Yes! Thank you. Linda~Thank you! "Love eternal" "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Well Myrtle, if I'm willing to follow you into a tornado, I guess tomorrow shouldn't scare me too much. Ok, since you asked so nicely, let's take a walk. I am bringing breadcrumbs though. I don't think I've mentioned that this is really one hell of a good poem. And I'd say that even if I wasn't biased toward it's writer. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wow Susan....ya did it didn't ya? Very nicely done....and when JM hollers like she did, it certainly is... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I was just wondering how come I find Susan's alliterations so lovely, well placed and inspirational and JM's drive me kittylittercrazy!?!?!??! (Better not be seeing any dancing tigers in the thread, Jams!) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You must be crazy from the heat to dare a moth about her tigerboyyee..... cant believe you even went there..... I got your litterations porch puppy.... heh  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Catch my breath on the wind as it passes by whispering your name this has a big sigh attached to it Susan, what graceful writing in you words!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked this |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Peel me to purity free my fears melt my mediocrity Susan! I have missed your words.  walking towards tomorrow with you. p.s love the new pic! very beautiful indeed, and lovely to see you smiling! love ya gal. ~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~ Neil Young |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Bravo Susan...I love this. It is more light and airy then I have read in a while. Of course I have been so busy lately too I don't get to pop over here as often as I want. Damn fine read this morning though. Well done! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
You're right Jams, musta been the fever...  He really would make such a nice shooting gallery target, ya know??? |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Well done, indeed, Susan |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
A lovely and lush invite! I like this best: "Peel me to purity free my fears melt my mediocrity" |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Your poetry always blows me away |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Good place to be, and such a pretty melody you're playing. Beautifully done Susan~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
pure passion and thats what it=s all aobut |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
i can't believe i almost missed this! beautiful susan! you do have a way... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Beautifully written! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Catch my breath on the wind as it passes by whispering your name Cup me in your comfort seal me in your security touch me to taboo Feel my heart beat as it races to the rhythm of your touch Oh my, Susan....I don't know how I missed this passionate beauty the first time around. You know how much I like these romantic writes.  Hugs Ethel . . . (psssstttttt!!! I sure hope that whoever's inspiring your writes like this keeps it up!!!!!)  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Eddie~Thank you darling! Smartchick~Thank you! Ethel~hmmmmm...my inspiration? Maybe its just a freedom from something that has been holding me down... Thank you!"if you won't let me fall for you |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"See the soul of who I become with the words that caress your lips" Stop making me I'm trying to work.  "I’m here without you baby but your still on my lonely mind |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Did you think I didn't notice that you added a sig? "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
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