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Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-10-27 10:00 PM

night bleeds a red dawn
sleep eludes me still
tortured by
the irritating echo
of a prayer unanswered

..and then one day you find..ten years have got behind you..no one told you when to run..you missed the starting gun..

wandering glider
Senior Member

since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

1 posted 2003-10-27 10:03 PM

echoes can
be like practice
listen
listen
listen

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2003-10-27 10:10 PM

night bleeds a red dawn..........
i like this much

dawn softens the nights shadows....sometimes

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2003-10-27 10:18 PM

thanks glider at this point i'd rather just sleep

Mish i liked the line too and thats about theonly thing i liked in this..the muse she's skipped town

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

4 posted 2003-10-27 10:23 PM

so.....
what have i suggested before?
thats when u pick up the paintbrush (or even crayons, if need be)
thats the nice thing about having more than one talent.............

pandonov
Member

since 2003-10-03

Posts 478
b/w conscience and insolence

5 posted 2003-10-27 10:28 PM

" The sun stands still, a thing
Of beauty. The stopped shadows
Develop moral overtones and these
Are what gets put into circulation.
Gargoyles and church music are one

Of many false doors."
Bob Perelman

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-10-27 10:38 PM

mish those days are dead what can i say

thanks petre, truths kill

pandonov
Member

since 2003-10-03

Posts 478
b/w conscience and insolence

7 posted 2003-10-27 10:43 PM

shhhh... don't say it so loudly

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

8 posted 2003-10-28 10:05 AM

my goodness.....
I can sooooo relate to this, loved it

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2003-10-28 10:08 AM

Aenimal
Happens all the time, enjoyed.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2003-10-28 10:24 AM

"night bleeds a red dawn
sleep eludes me still
tortured by
the irritating echo
of a prayer unanswered"

~ A bit of brilliance, Dear Aenimal. Hopefully your prayer will be answered soon so you can get some shut-eye!

HHH
EA

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2003-10-28 12:08 PM

yes, and sometimes the day dawns darkly

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

12 posted 2003-10-29 12:19 PM

Mann Raph . . ooh silence the only sound . . . cutting thinly through thick putrid air like a scythe . . .
God . .
I adore this
xxoo

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

13 posted 2003-10-29 12:20 PM

And when you do sleep? You dream about it..

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

14 posted 2003-10-29 05:33 PM

this is awsome. anything you write is.

well...unless it is making fun of hallmark.

did you see my picture called deprivation?

hehe...

[This message has been edited by Wind (10-29-2003 05:34 PM).]

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

15 posted 2003-10-29 05:38 PM

I sound like you...
or you sound like me...
I just use more words,
but you say it better.
anyway, I know what you mean

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

16 posted 2003-10-31 02:35 PM

Ouch! You just plucked our another little piece of me and wrote it down...

Well said, m'friend!

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

17 posted 2003-10-31 02:44 PM

Bah. I keep typing...backspacing ...typing..backspacing..
I can never seem to find the right words.
Probably because next to yours, mine are flea dung.

KristieSue

Senior Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

18 posted 2003-10-31 03:50 PM

love reading your writing today...this is awesome.

Ya know what they say. Curiosity salted the snail.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

19 posted 2003-11-01 05:57 AM

I'm reading this at 5 am my time on a Saturday morning... woke up several hours ago... need I say more about how much I relate? *S*

I like this, Aenimal... not the experience, but your relating of it. *S*

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

20 posted 2003-11-01 05:59 AM

night bleeds a red dawn
...
wow.

Jason

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

21 posted 2003-11-01 11:10 AM

night bleeds a red dawn
sleep eludes me still
tortured by
the irritating echo
of a prayer unanswered'''
amazing!!! really....

Will the wind ever remember the names
it has blown in the past with
its crutch its old age and its widsom
it whispers no this won't be the last

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

22 posted 2003-11-01 12:18 PM

(sigh) Oh Raphael, this is powerful, sweet friend, I wish for your prayer to be answered and may His grace fill all your heart! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Raphael, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

23 posted 2003-11-01 06:00 PM

Fantastic Raph.

M

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

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