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Save the peaches
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Save the peaches |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
The nibbums and the nackers are knackered down The street is breathing Cities and lights too bright for me to sleep Can I have a little peep? Flames flashing Why do they crave the dance When two become one silent, still Again? Save me the peaches, Mom - You can have the apple crisp -y chips...crisps. Suddenly purple becomes too purprle And lightning strikes are never striking For they haven't hit a solid thing For more than twenty years. I wondered where the butter went To slickly slide a square of it Around the fuzzy peaches (MOM! SAVE ME THE PEACHES!!) And snorting sugar from cereal box Lucky Charms indeedy The limping turtle's speedy And my toes are much too meaty From no sleep and lack of peachy. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. --Chang Tzu [This message has been edited by KoKo (10-25-2003 03:53 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah. Where a mind goes when listening to the little voices... fade to purple.  MUCH enjoyed, KoKo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
KoKo Enjoyed the read. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, save ME the apple crisp, please. Enjoyed the write, but now I'm hungry. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
lol, thanks everybody. I don't know what was going on there...funky thoughts just spilled out all over the place  Thaaaaank you! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I came back looking for this one because I enjoyed it so much yesterday. I liked your explanation too--and this indeed feel "free associated" and I found it really effective as a form in the way that sounds and smells do come back to remind of comforts found so long ago. So yep-I wanted a second helping.  Your plea for peaches left me feeling all fuzzy inside. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Aaaaaw Serenity, thank you!!!! That was really sweet!!  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"And snorting sugar from cereal box Lucky Charms indeedy The limping turtle's speedy And my toes are much too meaty From no sleep and lack of peachy." LOL I understand this completely!! Koko, you are amazing! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wonderful! Eric |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
LOL Thanks you guys!!! I really didn't think this would get any responses at all...It kind of scares me, LOL! Thanks everyone!!!!!!!!!! !!!!! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lauren, this is wonderfully written, sweet friend, I need those peaches in my cereal every morning too, no excuse not to! (giggles) This is an enjoyable read, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
cool, nice write |
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