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Open Poetry #29

Writing on the Wall

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

0 posted 2003-10-23 08:08 AM

My heart wears its face on its sleeve
Stringing music
Visual and concrete
Gates of paradise lives where the muse whispers

Your Christian buffet served me well
In light and dust internal
And writers guild
Speckled words in a night jar, I’ve saved
Publishing a collective effort

Electronic submissions of defeat
Where you are matters not
For a time we went underground
Your podium wore my words, for awhile
Writing graffiti all over your walls
Of a home that is no more
No more…
But I remember

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2003-10-23 08:34 AM

LeeJ,
Stimulating and intreguing, enjoyed.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2003-10-23 08:39 AM

Your podium wore my words, for awhile
Writing graffiti all over your walls
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something about those lines kept me coming back to them. Clever use of theme and extended metaphor here. Well done poetess Lee.

"I've still got sand in my shoes
and I can't shake the thought of you ...
I wanna see you again."

Dido

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-10-23 08:51 AM

Lee...I very much enjoy for writing.
I don't always have the time to stop and comment...
but, please know that I do read and enjoy your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-10-23 08:59 AM

agree with JM... nicely done Lee.

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