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Open Poetry #29

Sentance

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2003-10-22 03:45 PM

another slight word from you
would make me wonder, what
has become of your laughter
that leaves you longing.
in another momment I may
not understand my own
visions that collide in
my mind until the evening.
another sound from you
would keep me from guessing
if you are alive, or just
asleep at life once again.

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

1 posted 2003-10-22 04:31 PM

Another sound from you
would keep me from guessing
if you are alive, or just
asleep at life once again.

Sad. Sadelite

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

2 posted 2003-10-22 05:52 PM

No way to exist, sad.
Love,
Terri~

Mordecai's Mommy
Junior Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 12
San Miguel, Ca

3 posted 2003-11-13 06:42 PM

Beautiful...

Like a dove, I am now flying free...

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

4 posted 2003-11-13 07:00 PM

I understand.....
Well penned!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2003-11-13 07:09 PM

or just
asleep at life once again.

I like this Mike,  and the entire poem is
nice.  You can tweak it a little by correcting
two spelling errors....

1.  The title,  unless you intentionally
wrote it as "sentance"...should be sentence
2.  The word momment should be moment.

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