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Open Poetry #29

Waits in the Mist

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2003-10-21 10:09 AM

A Mist of gray shades a Miss in black
of a chill night, dockside by the bay;
Green and red lights, blurred in coming gray,
guides the ships back but none docks tonight
Pale cheeks now streaks tears cool not the blood,
his touch flamed her, and now he’s gone weeks,
Autumn winds chill she steams emotion
and longing broods, empty his to fill
Black lady goes, her wait continues
It’s not tonight, when she does not know.

Gloom

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2003-10-21 10:21 AM

Good write my friend...good good write

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2003-10-21 10:32 AM

Good morning, Dear Professor!

~ A brooding yet touching vignet that shall linger in my mind's eye...

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2003-10-21 10:36 AM

"Black lady goes, her wait continues"

yes....

Susan

Lotus Breeze
Member

since 2003-09-06

Posts 112

4 posted 2003-10-21 06:06 PM

I know this wait, this poem simple on surface and complex on reading second time. Each time I read your words feel more.

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

5 posted 2003-10-21 08:55 PM

"A Mist of gray shades a Miss in black"
Heavy description.   Upon reading it a second time, I felt the homonym, Missed, ringing through, too.
   Much enjoyed.
                          Sadelite

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