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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2003-10-21 10:09 AM


A Mist of gray shades a Miss in black
of a chill night, dockside by the bay;
Green and red lights, blurred in coming gray,
guides the ships back but none docks tonight
Pale cheeks now streaks tears cool not the blood,
his touch flamed her, and now he’s gone weeks,
Autumn winds chill she steams emotion
and longing broods, empty his to fill
Black lady goes, her wait continues
It’s not tonight, when she does not know.

Gloom


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LeeJ
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1 posted 2003-10-21 10:21 AM


Good write my friend...good good write
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
2 posted 2003-10-21 10:32 AM


Good morning, Dear Professor!

~ A brooding yet touching vignet that shall linger in my mind's eye...


Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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Florida
3 posted 2003-10-21 10:36 AM


"Black lady goes, her wait continues"

yes....

Susan

Lotus Breeze
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4 posted 2003-10-21 06:06 PM


I know this wait, this poem simple on surface and complex on reading second time.  Each time I read your words feel more.
Sadelite
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5 posted 2003-10-21 08:55 PM


"A Mist of gray shades a Miss in black"
Heavy description.   Upon reading it a second time, I felt the homonym, Missed, ringing through, too.
   Much enjoyed.
                          Sadelite

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