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Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2003-10-20 08:06 PM

McDonald's Drive-Through

I stared with hollow eyes
through the rear view mirror
at the couple in the car behind.
Time stood still the torture
as anger devoured my envy
for this sickening, gloating couple,
bleached blonde beauty at his side.

Emptiness growled my stomach sorrow
as I ordered four Big Mac’s
a milkshake and a large order of fries
though everyone knows how much I hate fries;
But surely their warmth will coax my cold
and the salt will bring me closer to heart failure
since I'm almost there anyway.

He kissed her, caressed her cheek and smiled
and I've never felt more alone
as I fought to hold back the tears
ashamed of how hardy I laughed
at the thought of putting my car into reverse
to smash their moment to pieces.

I bet he paints the sky with stars for her
and shines the moon mauve at her command.
I bet that she's a size two and can eat anything she wants.
Maybe I should change my order to a salad?
Too late. I need the comfort,
the pseudo-quasi happy denial
this survive one more day existence.

So tonight as skin sheds itself
I'll make love to the taste
then force the food down the toilet
and watch my insides swirl in shades of pain
into a pool of nothingness
with others before me
who suffer the same.

Ronald McDonald grins too damn much.
Maybe he'll let me borrow his mask?

By Melissa Long-Monette

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2003-10-20 08:37 PM

Hey!  Have not seen you around in a while,
but perhaps that is my blind eye...(kidding)

Enjoyed this,  and there are probably a
few others around who would like to smack
Ronald in the kisser a time or two...or
stuff a Big Mac where the sun...  well,
you know....

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

2 posted 2003-10-20 08:48 PM

Emptiness growled my stomach sorrow

bout time you posted

..and then one day you find..ten years have got behind you..no one told you when to run..you missed the starting gun..

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-10-20 08:51 PM

Hey You!

I love this Melissa!
Good to read you here again.
~Hugs & Smiles~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

Bonnie j
Senior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

4 posted 2003-10-20 09:26 PM

Lets go to Mickey Dee's and order a hot fudge sundae. We can gloat at the little size two as she eats her PLAIN RICE CAKES.
I promise I'll take out all the calories for you.
Love Bon-Bon

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-10-20 09:34 PM

Melissa, this is a very well written poem, as all
yours are. You are full of talent, Lady. I don't know
if this is about yourself, or just your wonderful
writing, but it touched my heart, either way. I really
felt for the person who was eating to comfort herself.
Very good writing, Melissa.

Hugs to you

Ethel

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

6 posted 2003-10-20 09:48 PM

Loved this, especially the last 2 lines

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2003-10-20 10:08 PM

Melissa,
Missed you, and your poetic abilities are not deminished by the sad of your write.
I wish I could wish you the reality you seek
but I am a mear mortal. LOL So I'll send you a

and a

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2003-10-20 10:15 PM

Malissa

I've made McDonalds into a happy meal for me, for it's a Wednesday adventure with my granddaughter and is about making memories. I understand the pain of this write, and wish you peace.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

9 posted 2003-10-21 11:59 PM

Steady. Be steady.

And next time you pass by a mirror, take a good hard look....

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Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2003-10-22 12:10 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Melissa, your poetry has been so sad as of late, sweet friend, I hope all is alright, and as happy, or perhaps narcissistic as Ronald McDonald can be, it surely isn't impossible to obtain his smile and I'mn sure soon you'll be getting more than McFlurry's and soft-serve! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, eat the food before it gets cold, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

11 posted 2003-10-22 01:03 AM

"So tonight as skin sheds itself
I'll make love to the taste"

i think only you could have thought up those words to put together so unexpectedly...i just think it's wonderfully vague and true at the same time, kudos to you

i think that it's brainless to assume that making changes to your window's view will gain a new perspective.

Fire Fairy
Junior Member

since 2003-10-22

Posts 43
Australia

12 posted 2003-10-22 01:16 AM

"I bet he paints the sky with stars for her
and shines the moon mauve at her command."

Woahhhhhh! That is pure magic... angels music to my ears. Thank you for opening up and releasing such raw emotion. Keep letting your words overflow, like a luscious waterfall flowing freely from within... let unfiltered feelings release through the ink of your pen and try to not be concious of the technicalities and strict trappings of form and structure. Don't hold back from anything that stirrs your heart to speak...

That girl was just a body you know... her soul may not even begin to comprehend the depths in which yours can dive.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2003-10-22 01:16 AM

bet he paints the sky with stars for her
and shines the moon mauve at her command.
I bet that she's a size two and can eat anything she wants.
Maybe I should change my order to a salad?
Too late. I need the comfort,
the pseudo-quasi happy denial
this survive one more day existence.

Not funny!!! But so very well said Melissa~
Love the small fries, and the way you threw this into reverse!!!

dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

14 posted 2003-10-22 05:48 AM

Oh my...such anger! Pass the fries. Larry

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

15 posted 2003-10-22 11:25 AM

I feel the same when I see happy couples, I hate them for their happiness and wonder why I don't have it...

You wrote this wonderfully and I enjoyed it very much.

Susan

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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