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Opposite elements are we love
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Opposite elements are we love |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Sometimes daydreams are flammable often I stench of fires smoked to death the embers~flashbacks burning long after damage such tiny glow is enough to spark you beautiful dangerous flame only to drown your element with the bitter sob of fallen tear wrench of body and mind Not far from flame is water always . . |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
wow, great write, fantastic imiagery "daydreams are flammable often I stench of fires smoked to death" i loved this, such a wonderful metaphore...adding this for sure! "For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sometimes daydreams are flammable often I stench of fires smoked to death the embers~flashbacks burning long after damage such tiny glow is enough to spark you beautiful dangerous flame ============================= OH GOOD GRIEF........ gem--you just wrote a moth anthem.... so that was you in me mothy mirror  awesome write girlie...love the mothaphor LOL ahhhh the pretty blue flame.... whats a moth to do but yearn and burn "I've still got sand in my shoes |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
perfect.. ..and then one day you find..ten years have got behind you..no one told you when to run..you missed the starting gun.. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
do you remeber when I said fire was never my element because I'd been burned to many times? smiles..well there you go you express it beautifuly What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Such words as these burn deep ... *S |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wowowowoowowowowow...wow... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Thanks you guys. You know what, this was the first poem i'd written in a long while that i actually liked. Glad you enjoyed reading, because I enjoyed writing. Windy lizzie, yep, fire when you smell it, run for the hills. or blow for the hills in your case. heh. Lol Janet Marie, like a moth to the flame, I must be a moth too! I always go for the pretty lights, that hurt! (though as i think i've said before, i am frightened to death of moths. harmless i know, but its the flapping!) ~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~ Neil Young |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
aweseome  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
GAH! You are awesome! |
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