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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-09-23 11:14 AM

On Such Rainy Days

The writing's on the blue
and no matter how much I scrub,
it still comes through
just enough
to make me wince
when I feel the "river of time"
passing me by
flooding me with those feelings of
"forget-me-nots"
that I question, expecting
their days to be over,
season's changing,
drooping, my eyes and the last Hibiscus
wet with remnants of the night.

I held more love and faith
in those days I walked alongside you
than even words, or lips, or
anticipation could divulge
and I sleep less
when each night my armor comes down
and the shadows take their place
unweaving the threads of trust
that had been my comfort
on such rainy days.

Ignorant are my dreams
of the touch of you
no longer occupied by seduction
instead, missing that part of you,
that filled me with acceptance
that blended my moments
with silent worth
challenging me to each new day
to chance upon more,
more than I had painted
in a mind that felt forgotten.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2003-09-23 11:21 AM

MyDearFriend~
Is it fair to say that the rain becomes you ?
Well, it saturates you with such poignant saline thoughts ... this is beautifully moving~

I wrap the rain around me in umbrella'd thoughts of your making~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2003-09-23 11:32 AM

I do love the rain although we have been graced with an abundance of it this year...more than is neccessary.

And it does usually fit my mood

We were lucky in Florida...no rain at all during our stay.

hugs Marge
M

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

3 posted 2003-09-23 01:53 PM

challenging me to each new day
to chance upon more,
more than I had painted
in a mind that felt forgotten.

Maureen....do you realize what a fine writer you really are?!! This poem just blew me away and is going directly into my library! hugs, Chris

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-09-23 01:58 PM

The writing's on the blue
and no matter how much I scrub,
it still comes through
just enough
to make me wince
when I feel the "river of time"
passing me by
flooding me with those feelings of
"forget-me-nots"

Maureen, I echo what Marge and Chris said about your writing. Lady, if I were to copy and paste every part of your writings that were my favorite parts, I'd have the whole poem copied again in my replies to you!!! LOL It doesn't matter what subject you write about, you do it with excellence and grace. You are truly blessed with talent, my friend.

Hugs to you, sweet lady

Ethel

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2003-09-23 03:20 PM

Ignorant are my dreams
of the touch of you
no longer occupied by seduction
instead, missing that part of you,
that filled me with acceptance
that blended my moments
with silent worth
challenging me to each new day
to chance upon more,
more than I had painted
in a mind that felt forgotten.
lady M... your mind should never feel forgotten.. it is far too interesting for that..

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

6 posted 2003-09-23 03:24 PM

enjoyed your thoughts,,,

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

7 posted 2003-09-23 04:19 PM

Much tender sadness in this poem...and very well expressed..

believe in what your heart feels...

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2003-09-23 04:23 PM

I held more love and faith
in those days I walked alongside you
than even words, or lips, or
anticipation could divulge
and I sleep less
when each night my armor comes down
and the shadows take their place
unweaving the threads of trust
that had been my comfort
on such rainy days.

Oh that verse tugs so hard at my heart...
This is a lovely poem, sad but true.

Hugs Maur~

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

9 posted 2003-09-23 04:30 PM

This invokes such a soft feeling within. Thanks,
Eric

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