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Hurry Me
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~I pray the wind will hurry me~ I have waited too long, and it's time to set sail, back to my paradise where my muse welcomes me unlike anyone who has come before or since then. There are no locks on the door no questions asked aside from my well being the silence speaks a language all it's own. I have missed what seems like forever those tender words of inspire and the gentle hold he has on me he is a skip across the wake, watching me fall. While keeping my glass half full he holds me close, cradled in his arms it is then I truly know there is no place I'd rather be. Standing like a rock on the shores of my desire remaining firm after all this time he is my anchor when I am drifting away shielding the sun that threatens to burn me. Without mixing words or sinking to my knees there is no forsaking what is real for all the secrets that I keep belong to him slipping through the sway of palm trees. He is a warm hand and gentle shoulder offering an unconditional acceptance of who I am knowing the inner workings of my restless heart inside and out. We are strung loosely together, like a flower lei that crowns me tossing my halo out to sea for we both know good and well, I am no angel nor do I pretend to be, I'm human after all. There is no fooling or make believing therein lies a priceless gift he gives to me and through my journeys he lets me go and brings me back around. But most importantly he allows me the freedom to simply be. ~I pray the wind will hurry me~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (10-18-2003 11:39 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Bluesy girl...this is your best by far!! From the opening and closing lines.. ~I pray the wind will hurry me~ To everything in-between... I could not choose a favourite stanza or lines.. this is SO uplifting and full of unconditional love. Into my library it goes!!! ~Smiles & warm hugs, Nancy~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Bluesy, your humble pie, tastes deliciously like my own. Very nice write....Truly a treasure when you have a muse of the caliber you do. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
But most importantly he allows me the freedom to simply be.'' ~~~~~~~~~ That is without a doubt the true meaning of love, and friendship....lucky you, lucky him...hugssss lady....good to see that smile...  Lauren~ Will the wind ever remember |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is an awesome description of love. I loved it Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
tossing my halo out to sea for we both know good and well, I am no angel nor do I pretend to be, I'm human after all adored those lines, excellent write |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Without mixing words or sinking to my knees there is no forsaking what is real for all the secrets that I keep belong to him slipping through the sway of palm trees. He is a warm hand and gentle shoulder offering an unconditional acceptance of who I am knowing the inner workings of my restless heart inside and out. We are strung loosely together, like a flower lei that crowns me tossing my halo out to sea for we both know good and well, I am no angel nor do I pretend to be, I'm human after all. Goodness Lori...I so relate to this. It was like you were reading my mind.  Hugs  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just beautiful I'm praying with ya |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Simply wonderful but I was hurried too soon to the end. Luckily I can read it again! |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
It is completely true...you're unique, a standout even among poets, who all try to stand out as unique. I hope this homecoming of yours brings bliss. You deserve that. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Bluesy~ This truly is a remarkable writing... I just can't tell if it's someone lost to you (from the beginning of the poem) or someone that has come into your life and is supportive and loving (from the ending). "if you won't let me fall for you |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Blues That is great writing with such personal charisma entwined throughout..... Absolutely love the ending! How fitting... Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Bluesy, your muse is never lost.You bring so much in your writes.It amazes me the talent and creativity you show. Crystal |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Lori, this is beautiful, sweet friend, may the wind always come to you and give you a soft carpet ride to the stars! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
He is a warm hand and gentle shoulder offering an unconditional acceptance of who I am knowing the inner workings of my restless heart inside and out. Hurry indeed. *S* This is beautiful, Bluesy! *S* |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing with us. |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Beautiful sentiments of love. Thanks for sharing. SG |
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