Open Poetry #29 |
A New Poem |
iwontdrownagain Junior Member
since 2003-10-04
Posts 39Massachusetts |
Ok, I know it has been a while since I last posted, so here is a recent poem. It's not what you think it is about. I have been writing poetry like this lately, so I am talking about something completely different in this poem. I'll save the title for last. You won't understand it until I tell you. Enjoy! Psychotic, Anorexic, Bulimic. So ignore the food Or just throw it up, Spit it out. Move about in your cubicle, Alone, day after day In that box of glass that’s Vulnerable to shattering and Breaking into pieces with People looking in. You’re cowering in the corner Freezing but unaware of the cold around you. Secluded from everyone No exterior contact But seeing everyone see you, See you defenseless, Unable to live outside your space of glass Same people, same colors, same sounds. “Same [edited by moderator] , different day,” Says the great Stephen King. The lines on your body never change. Jagged, red, no one asks how they got there. Some storied may have been started And passed along, But no one seems to care. You’re in your own utopia, Where it’s all about you, unmindful of the outside Oblivious to the eyes that watch you Or the mouths that speak of you. So there it is, folks. This poem is called "Ode to Cat Food." Cat food is my fish.... Critique is much welcomed! ~Lynn [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (10-17-2003 02:46 PM).] |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Lynn, this was great.If any critique was given it's that you'vegot a excellent talent. Crystal |
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iwontdrownagain Junior Member
since 2003-10-04
Posts 39Massachusetts |
Thank you...I noticed that the s-word had been blocked out. I forgot I had that in there. Haha. Anyway thank you again! ~Lynn "The green of your eyes |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Just has to say I enjoyed this one. Great write. "When your life is tossed and turning And you are on the raging sea I'll come and pull you from the water Then you will know that you are free" - Michael W. Smith [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (10-18-2003 08:58 PM).] |
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