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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2003-10-14 07:57 PM

I cursed at the fumble of my tongue as
heels clicked the cool night.  Sensually
silhouetted by cheap neon, passing
lights of scurrying signs for hire.

You were there,   bruising a piece of earth
beneath black stiletto heels
where time stood shivering at the
fragrance of you outside a window.
The  stark stare of mannequin eyes
following, weeping to be free and
dance the dusk to dawn.

And I, prince of my dreams, dealer
of my destiny stand silent.   The clink
of lonely change telling a sad tale as
shutters ride squeaking wheels to the
cold walk.

Tomorrow....as pigeons roost the
fading sunlight and neon again hums
the still air....mannequins shall wait,
just as I
to dance
the dusk
to dawn.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2003-10-14 08:04 PM

Dang Barry...you're writing continues to grow and grow so quickly.
You've become so very polished...the 'sighs' come automatically.
What say I put on some WS and we dance the tango?

~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2003-10-14 08:43 PM

Your words wend a winsome waltz...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-10-14 08:44 PM

If I were a man
I would have wished
to write this...

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

4 posted 2003-10-14 08:52 PM

Nancy....deal!  I'll be there soon...well,
maybe before the last snow falls.  And yep!
WS is IT!

Nan,  felt a little nostalgic tonite,  and
of course a little romantic....imagine that!
Thanx for your warm comments!!

Sun,  But you are not.....so,  I guess that
makes us even or close...because there have
been numerous of your own that I wished I
had written....  Thanx KJ....

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-10-14 10:18 PM

bruising a piece of earth
beneath black stiletto heels

Barry?
I love that line
and this reminded me
of NYC . . .
I dont know why
the streets the lights
the night . . .
dank sidewalks and steam . . .

*smile*
xxoo

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2003-10-15 08:05 AM

Now..... this one bud..has become my favorite from you so far... here it seems you reach a bit deeper and there is a bit of real life grit to the images that speaks to me past the form and message to say..hey, I am real....

very nicely done sir.. VERY nice indeed

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