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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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Midnight falls in safe decline coughing the dust from my lungs, never speaking for fear of waking the dead. are the doors locked? are the windows boarded? there is nothing to fear but millions of empty fields and all of those imaginary shadows… 50% of us are lifeless, but still awake, I am still awake, I grow a new skin, one to cover fractured bones and abrasions of my latest mistake. I will paint it white as snow, to stop the rusting of my frame, my idle presence. Are we falling? will I repeat this ceaseless phrase? I am falling falling falling falling I have hit the ground again. Here, I am just a number, 6+7+NO. blue+yellow=Green, I divide myself until I’m gone, fading out with the last lights flashing (red and blue and red and blue): a standstill oblivion. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall. -yorke/bjork [This message has been edited by Wind (10-13-2003 04:27 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Liz... such standstills seem common in my world.. minus the fear of empty fields... mine is of the waking trees and all the stones that lie in wait.... your talent is showing my dear... might want to pull it up just a bit so everyone doesn't see it has lace... that one can see through |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Both the poem, and the new pic, get two  |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
quote: Elizabeth, it's the small insights like those two lines, which mark the growth of a poet. I am priveleged to be able to watch you unravel. Those two lines alone filled me with inspiration. As they contribute to your poem as a whole, well, I have to say that introspection is doing you a world of good. Don't ever stop looking inside of yourself, there's a universe in your imagination. Take care. Brian Faith is a fine invention |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
geesh ron...you don't have to keep hinting that I have feelings or weaknesses. trust me..I know it. Thanks sunshine  What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Also love the new pic. I hated the previous one, it looked like you were in a breath-holding competition or something.  The new one better embodies you and your work. Nice choice. What's that you're standing in front of? Or did you edit that into the photo? I'm curious.  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I edited it with the inside of a computer...hehe I hated the last one too..I just am not photogenic..eyes always half closed (sometimes only one of them but...) I like yours too hair-boy What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
quote: Oh, are you like that too? Carly (Child of the Stars) has one eye that's always half-closed. She named him "Slim." Maybe it's characteristic of a poet. I don't know. But mine were always both as open as each other. Although one doesn't see quite as well as the other. Shrug... Faith is a fine invention |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I don't name my eyes... its the right one..heh gah...my friends call it my evil eye though..or the twitchy one  people find tend to find me quite scary when I'm mad... What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall. -yorke/bjork [This message has been edited by Wind (10-13-2003 04:40 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
"geesh ron...you don't have to keep hinting that I have feelings or weaknesses. trust me..I know it." laughing at you... I am not picking and me saying those things is meant to show I see the human side.. and that your talent and growth are engaging to watch... but if you want to hide it... you are going to have to work harder... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
why would I want to hide it? this is just another insomnia thingie written at 12:00... still haviing trouble seeing what you are trying to tell me What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ugh...I wanna post this in the haven now that we have it..I hate having so many people read this  I know its stupid but what'ya gonna do? What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
LOL.. why do I feel I make you uncomfortable..??? the poem and the things I have seen from your pen just get better and better... and you... just continue to grow not only as a poet.. but I think as a person.. so I enjoy it.. and seeing it happen.. I do not mean to make you over think or uncomfortable.. if I do.. my apologies. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
everyone makes me feel uncomfortable. everyone scares me. nothing personal. I just don't know what you are trying to say...but I get it now. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ugh...I sound so mean..no ron, I really appriciate you. HONESTLY What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Facinating title for a poem that feels like falling, falling, falling. Rf |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!!! ..On the poem and the new pic!! ~Hugs~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Liz~ I for one, enjoy what you write and will find them no matter where you post them... Susan "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I know...thanks you three just in a...you know kinda mood. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"someone's in your house..."  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
"we are taking over you brain..this is a conpiracy...neneerneenerneerner...someone's in your house! someone's in your house!" hehheh. thanks ser What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
lava the words lava the pic. I'm not photogenic either anytime someone takes my pic my face shows up [This message has been edited by Aenimal (10-13-2003 10:10 PM).] |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
... liz u scare me. the poem makes no sense to us unlemon like people. Maybe it's a canadian thing...... Meg Meg- And the Texan pushed the Mexican out of the plane and screamed, "Long live the ALAMO!!!!!!!!!" |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Raph If i hear you insult yourself one more time I swear I will hurt you. you're cute. ya see? even I admit that. so will gem...damn she's said it a hundred times already. and...meg#2 yanno I'm not canadian...only raph but..geesh. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
You're pretty amazing for a slacker!!!!!!! Great write kiddo. I'm impressed...again!! You can't start a fire |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Yer both insane, and as i've said to gemma and others when threatened..Not in the face! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
see..ya do care about yer face. a little too much..most likely. gah What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Of course i worry bout my face! I don't want it to get worse than this! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ok I give up I'll JUST go allong with you and tell you that your hideous. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thank you, it's for your own good you know grin In a forest pitch-dark, glowed the tiniest spark.. It burst into flame |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
*coughs* sig stealer I got her first and so there What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
cough* wannabe cough*... like..anyways...i've only been a fan since her debut album..puhleeze |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
yeah well...um I've got Thom yorke too. so there why am I such a brat? pretty boy...neenerneenerneener  now now Liz...be nice to the pathetic aenimal...it might have raibes and you don't want to upset it.Gem? I need backup here... What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I do NOT have rabies...the vet gave me all my shots and I'm fine now.. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
hehe... we are such idiots. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I think it was Sir Winston Churchill who said it best.. "Yes." From the minute you saw it |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Um...woah. |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
very cool indeed.. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Read it was amazed, then read the comments and got stuck at Brian's - listen to him - he's right (this time.) Brother have you ever grown in your work, which was already way beyond your years in my opinion anyway. Great work - insominia suits you |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Liz, you have certainly conquered free verse... Good write. “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your insomnia has not been wasted! You put it to very good use, Dear Liz of the Wind!  ~ Sleep Dear One, and may peace attend thee.. Loving hugs, EA |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
nicely penned.... I am glad I could read this today... didn't read all the discussions tho' regards sudhir |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is good stuff... Are you sure you're 14? I like the pic too - The eyes have it...  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nicely written |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Liz, that new pix suits the personality that shines through your writes. I am really enjoying watching you grow, both as a poet and a real person right before our collective Pipster eyes. It's a total pleasure. And this write? amazingly in tune, naneers and all. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Wonderful poem Wind. It amazes me the way you weave your thoughts together. This is something I really have to learn. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
thanks guys and raph...ya didn't have to change your sig yanno I was just kidding... we must tell them all What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Hey Goob, can ya hear me now???? "Boycott Wind, Save a Puppy" |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
What is up with your signature? I knew that people were out to get me...and they laughed when i said it was all a conspiracy... What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Liz? a beauty once again . . . 50% of us are lifeless, but still awake, I am still awake, I grow a new skin, one to cover fractured bones and abrasions of my latest mistake. brilliant stanza and LMAO at the thread *smile* xxoo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I know i didn't have to change the sig..yer not the boss of me! Actually i figured since you had Bjork covered i'd give a shout out to my homegirl Harmer..what up?! word G dat's for all my peeps up in da hood |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
are the doors locked? are the windows boarded? there is nothing to fear but millions of empty fields and all of those imaginary shadows… I looooovveeeeee you, Liz........ your poetry is amazing, just like you are. I love reading it and your threads. You are awesome, my little friend. And, you know that I love your new picture, too.....  Hugs  Ethel |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Having fun without meeeeeeeeeee? sniff Liz, I shall make no comment on Raphael Giuffrida's mental health, nor the state of his face.he's incapable of taking compliments. that was a comment. he's a beautiful man. so was that. I've just been to the doctors, wooo he was cute give up liz, just call him names instead.  <<<<< RaphI got a new rolling stones poster today, ooooh it's the bees knees! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
gem- I've got the hottest shirt with the 40 licks thingie on it...you'd l#ve it heh....and yep...this thread is insane as is everything else I am involved in. thanks to all of you I lava you! What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
thats what my poster had on it , the tongue, ohhhh its the best. i want a t shirt to match! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
mine is pink and has a huge tongue on it! hehe nananananananana look how rediculously long this is...we definately need family diolouge back.... What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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