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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2003-10-10 12:25 PM

The fall is no slow thing --
a heady, constant sting
the recipients of said fall
will do their best to numb away.
So smiles can be wired ready,
and eyes can stare without reproach.
And hands can clasp from hand to hand,
the soft dry weight that flesh provides.

The fall is no sudden thing.
It unlatches, loosens, over years.
The sky one day may seem bright gray,
but soon it will blue up again --
one gets used to seeing changes
in the surface of a texture
through a screen of abused thoughts
filtering spilled over words.
Catch them at the lip, and sip
or sooner may you fall than not.

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

1 posted 2003-10-10 12:28 PM

This was good.You put your words to where they just fall all in a row with the ease of being able to understand.(not sure if that made sense or not..lol).Anyways I much enjoyed this.

Crystal

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2003-10-10 02:20 PM

Thank you, Crystal.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

3 posted 2003-10-10 04:16 PM

I like...

~Tier

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-10-10 04:22 PM

(chuckling)..

there is humor in this... a dry fallish sort of humor....

PsychoticBunni
Member

since 2003-10-03

Posts 162
Mythical Atlantis

5 posted 2003-10-10 04:42 PM

me like. i can see myself falling right out of the clouds when i read it and it is a rather humorous picture.

Meg- And the Texan pushed the Mexican out of the plane and screamed, "Long live the ALAMO!!!!!!!!!"

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

6 posted 2003-10-10 05:00 PM

Glad you all enjoyed the ... uh ... "humor" of this piece.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2003-10-10 05:24 PM

hey...what can I say... I happen to see black humor in a lot of things...

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2003-10-10 05:30 PM

As always a wonder to read you Mike

Maree.

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2003-10-10 05:30 PM

Ron,

Same here, actually. If I couldn't laugh, I'd be dead.

(said with humorous overstatement)

Thanks, Maree. I appreciate that.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (10-10-2003 05:36 PM).]

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

10 posted 2003-10-10 05:41 PM

I think that this is more than changing seasons.

well heck since its you I KNOW it is.

What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall?
All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall.
-yorke/bjork

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

11 posted 2003-10-10 10:35 PM

Yup..

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