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Open Poetry #29

The Nearness of You

Lotus Breeze
Member

since 2003-09-06

Posts 112

0 posted 2003-10-09 09:03 PM

Unexpected here,
A short brief visit to me,
It brings so great cheer
Excitement in my day
Joy though you soon go away

Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

1 posted 2003-10-09 09:06 PM

dont we all know how short joy lasts...good write

We do away with your kind...I am war I am pain I am all you've ever slein I am tears in your eyes I am truth I am lies. Dimmu Borgir

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2003-10-09 09:11 PM

Nicely done, a short visit, even when it
is for a week or so....seeming so very quick
to pass by...like the breeze that comes
suddenly into a window and then lies still.

Lotus Breeze
Member

since 2003-09-06

Posts 112

3 posted 2003-10-09 09:15 PM

You kind to respond, too short, but for as long as he here

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-10-09 10:58 PM

electricity
still lingering in the air
even though you're gone...

Good to see you, Lotus Breeze...

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

5 posted 2003-10-09 11:40 PM

Hello Lotus Breeze

Your words were very beautiful.

Take care.......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

6 posted 2003-10-10 01:31 AM

Some of the simplest things bring the greatest of joys.Beautifully penned.

Crystal

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2003-10-10 08:00 AM

I think...it is the wording and the use of language which makes this simple short statement so intriguing... I found myself wanting to play with the same set of words and mold them into something else..and at the same time..enjoyed what was an innocence inthe lines that captivates....

in other words..I enjoyed..lol

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