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On Evening's Film
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On Evening's Film |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
In contrast Shadows deepen the line of your throat And my words hang Halfway in my own as I am unable To utter these hard syllables Against such a background Of grey tones that paint you here Half lit in evening With touches of last wave reflected sun Cascading on the curve of your back Then revealing a half turned smile Of far off musing Content perhaps To ponder the ending day. Color would not do you justice here For there is too much said in the form Far more in the absence Detail begs That would be refused to the eye If the palette broadened to reds or blues When you move The curves of you Bend the light and leave me in gasp Of one more breath to inhale All I see And know all you don’t say Is in your own way being kind Adams would approve This landscape Yet I would capture it not as he But instead Hold it in my head To develop later In the dark of my heart |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ansel would approve of the poem, too... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In contrast Shadows deepen the line of your throat And my words hang Halfway in my own as I am unable To utter these hard syllables Against such a background Of grey tones that paint you here Half lit in evening With touches of last wave reflected sun Cascading on the curve of your back Then revealing a half turned smile Of far off musing Content perhaps To ponder the ending day. ================================ *touching the screen* good Lord I love your poetry. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sunshine... I doubt it..but thank you Mothy one... ( touching screen) what poetry hun? It's all a bar trick I told you...  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...I think you captured it perfectly! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
So good, Ron...I will be forever in awe of your work. You know, everytime time I read you, I wonder...wonder how you do it so well every time, every word. Patricia |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
you are one of the best, indeed...ya just need to worry less.... about other people I mean... ugh...yanno what I mean..your a genius, lets put it that way And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Martie... thank you my friend.. but it is never perfect..only an illusion of passing.. and one in each telling becomes something slightly different..but then..it always is, filled with the subtle differences isn't it? Patricia.. I actually grinned at your reply.. I thank you sincerely for the kind words.... but dear lady, I am not every word perfect every time.. all too aften I am juxtaposed on idea and actual words.. but am honored you would say such a nice thing.. Liz... come here you human! lol... ok...ok..all I was going to do was hug you for saying such nice things.... no need to throw that koolaid at me.. genius...no... but thank you dear for saying nice things... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
" With touches of last wave reflected sun Cascading on the curve of your back Then revealing a half turned smile Of far off musing Content perhaps To ponder the ending day." Tell JM to move over... this moth wants her hands on the screen as well. Damn!  ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Damn, do I understand this... Almost made me swallow, hard...but I caught myself. I'm so good at that. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you leave me speechless each time, if this is a bar trick, can I start a tab? WOW hon...hugsss you Lauren~ There's a song inside my soul |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh yesssssss... this one.......... bar trick huh? ... OK... Bartender...another round please.  |
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