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EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

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0 posted 2003-10-09 02:31 PM

Love's Maelstrom

The reverberating thunder of the
incoming tidal flow washes over
my being. It impacts against me with
an intensity that is perceptible,
and I am molested by the shock wave
as if merely a buoy upon the brine.
What care I about the permanence in
which I am drowning? Let the cold brackish
water whorl my thoughts into the vortex
for I would be empty of mind. Open
eyed I jump into that torrent and at
once I feel the tug, which would yank me to
the caliginous depths below. With ease
I relinquish my inclinations as
I am pulled downwards, and there is no fear
as I open my mouth and draw in that
which has claimed my being. There's a coolness
that chills my lungs and sanguine fluids
as I draw into myself a seaway
of hurt, for I know I love her with all
my heart, even though this night she takes my
life. But I care enough to die for her.
There was heretofore a time when within
her eyes I could descry the resonate
semblance of all that I felt. My days were
occupied with sunbeams and laughter and
each instant was beloved. Now when I look
into those penetrating turquoise eyes
all I see is the storm-tossed high seas and
I know that the ocean is a glacial,
unforgiving, courtesan. In Davy
Jones locker she closets the memories
of what we once meant to one another,
and it is there that I will lie in my
sodden sepulture. Like some sunken or
fallen galleon out of ages past please
abandon me to my lifeless vault. The
only golden trinket you will find here
is my everlasting fervor to be
with her. Seek your coin of the realm elsewhere,
for in this mundane existence there is
only the frigid press of my lips to
hers, a lover's last kiss, one final embrace,
for love's maelstrom is my burying place.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

SharaRose
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since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

1 posted 2003-10-09 02:36 PM

Stormy, but still centered on love. wow.
Love,
Terri~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-10-09 02:41 PM

Kevin, you even write of the heartache
of love, lovingly. I hope this isn't from
personal experience. It hurt.

Hugs

Ethel

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

3 posted 2003-10-09 02:54 PM

Thank-you for the comments SharaRose and garysgirl. Sorry my poetry had not a happier theme today. (Wink!) Sometimes I draw too deeply from the well within. Next time I will post sopmething a little less dark.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-10-09 03:31 PM

But Kevin, love is not always happy. You write of that side so well, is what I meant. I like that you can write about what is deep inside. That's what we all need to do. I have some things that happened to me in my past that I truly wish that I could write about. I think it would help. So, keep writing.

Hugs

Ethel

froggy
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since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

5 posted 2003-10-09 04:12 PM

Hey Shakespeare ;-)

Love it Love it
Love it.

:-)

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2003-10-10 03:20 PM

easy to drown in some things... love it would seem perhaps the easiest next to hate..

well done... well done indeed

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2003-10-10 09:47 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Kevin, this is so very heartfelt, sweet friend, In certainly hope this isn't a reality of yours right now and that your love has been requited without constraint! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs and good wishes your way, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kevin, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2003-10-11 12:06 PM

Oh, I do like the depths of this one
your words flow smoothly over the rough rocks of storm-tossed love.
Very very effective imagery.
Evocative, for sure.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2003-10-11 12:11 PM

Very emotive and well done!

paraboxer
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since 2002-11-10

Posts 121
Maryland, USA

10 posted 2003-10-11 12:49 PM

Great poem, I must say. True love, if it is meant to last, will endure through all travails, disputes and such because both of you love each other so much that you're willing to make it work. I know that because my parents, who've been married for twenty-four years, still love each other.

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

11 posted 2003-10-11 01:05 AM

Thank-you everyone for the comments on this piece. I was very surprised to get home from work and find it at the top of the list. I actually came on to check out the comments on my newest piece The House on Cleveland Street. Finding this poem still being read though made me smile. Thank you so very much my friends. Rest assure though this is an old story and all is well here. Love each of you dearly. Kevin!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

12 posted 2003-10-11 06:56 PM

Hi, EV

No surprise -- top of the list is where this belongs. Hope it stays there for a while.

~~J

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