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On Love and Hope
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On Love and Hope |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
On Love and Hope As the desert mirage mocks the parched lips, So sweet dreams will fade with the rising sun -- As reality the consciousness grips -- The Eden of the mind is on the run. When first rays of light lone shadows spawn, Awake each day on bed of gritty dunes -- Then dance with frigid stillness of the dawn To the rhythm of the solitary tunes. The silent screams that make the eardrums bleed; The cries that echo in abandoned well -- For love has fled, and none is left to feed The remnants of the bare, deserted shell -- Yet, within the cries, an inaudible Whisper calls; this infant of a wonder; -- And Time, the Overseer amiable, Will forge the whisper into roaring thunder. Thus in Hope there looms the death of strife -- And the whisper of a love that will not die Is carried by the yearning for new life -- For upon Eternal wings -- Love does fly. CG |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Wow -- very nice! This rings of a classic poem, indeed. Congratulations on a write very well done. Why are there no responses??? -MVS You CAN make a difference: http://educate-yourself.org/ [This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (08-13-2003 08:38 PM).] |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I'm rather curious as to why this has only one reply, myself. I found it very enchanting and lilting, as was said before, like a good classic poem. I liked these two stanzas: "As the desert mirage mocks the parched lips, So sweet dreams will fade with the rising sun -- As reality the consciousness grips -- The Eden of the mind is on the run. When first rays of light lone shadows spawn, Awake each day on bed of gritty dunes -- Then dance with frigid stillness of the dawn To the rhythm of the solitary tunes." It gives me the impression of our dreams being an Eden like oasis in the middle of a rough dry desert (ie, waking life), but then at the end there is hope after all. Very touching, and well done. Enjoyed the read.  Nicole |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thus in Hope there looms the death of strife -- And the whisper of a love that will not die Is carried by the yearning for new life -- For upon Eternal wings -- Love does fly. This is beautiful. Enjoyed. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You have captured so much! I wanted to pick and choose my favorite verse, but I found it impossible to play favorites. Gawd, you're good!! Bravo, bravo CG~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
This deserves another go-'round! -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
this is a terrific write,, |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Thank you all for the words of appreciation, and for rescuing this piece from the abyss of nothingness....  Yes, classic poetry is my weakness -- hopefully not demise.  CG |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"For upon eternal wings-love does fly." James |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
You are a great poet! enjoyed your style of poetry... Thanks~ARH [This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (08-16-2003 12:25 AM).] |
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