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Suetang
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0 posted 2003-08-03 03:06 AM



Picture by Alan Ayers

* * *

I remember a time
It seemed not so long ago
When the pleasures of our love
Would freely bloom and grow

I remember how you held me
Like there was no tomorrow
I never thought there'd be a time
When I'd be drowning in my sorrow

I remember how you loved me
With a burning deep desire
We reached love's highest peak
Beside the glow of the open fire

I thought you'd be with me forever
That with me you'd always stay
I never entertained the notion
That you'd take your love away

But the blooms in our bouquet
Have all shrivelled up and died
You poisoned what we had
With your cruel and bitter lies

I was blind to the fact
You didn't love me anymore
But love will find me once again
And come knocking on my door

* * *

I should point out that this was not
written from personal experience.


I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

© Copyright 2003 Sue Tancheff - All Rights Reserved
Kaoru
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1 posted 2003-08-03 03:18 AM


This is a powerful, and strengthening write..Very inspiring.
Patricia
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2 posted 2003-08-03 08:06 AM


I was blind to the fact
You didn't love me anymore
But love will find me once again
And come knocking on my door

Such optimism in this...words I needed this morning, Sue.  Thanks!

A great write!

Patricia

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2003-08-03 08:09 AM


Suetang
Well done a good write, enjoyed.

Bill Charles
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4 posted 2003-08-03 08:49 AM


Suetang - even though this is not from personal experience as you mentioned, it's written with the depth that it is. Nice write Sue...

BC

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5 posted 2003-09-19 11:58 PM


I thought you'd be with me forever
That with me you'd always stay
I never entertained the notion
That you'd take your love away


This is so beautioful, even
if it is sad.

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Hugs  
Ethel


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6 posted 2003-09-20 01:12 AM




(big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is so very sad and I'm only glad it isn't related to you as you deserve true happiness forever, though sadly this is a case for many others! (sad sigh) This is a beautifully compassionate piece, sweet friend, you truly have the heart of an angel who only wants to help and comfort everyone, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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7 posted 2003-09-20 03:22 AM


strong and powerful write! write on bella!!
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8 posted 2003-09-20 09:50 AM


Experience of yours or not, your poem is true-true-true for so many, and beautifully written.

We don't always need to state fact, in order to say truth.

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Susan Caldwell
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9 posted 2003-09-20 11:33 AM


First let me say, the picture?  I want her dress...

The poem?  Totally understand what it says..

Susan

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10 posted 2003-09-20 05:21 PM


Nice work, and it feels personal to me. That's the object of a good poem, I think.
Sandra

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