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Mother Hen Wilting
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Mother Hen Wilting |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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woman.... get a grip.. take five and breathe now......... the sea is rising for you your eyes are yellowed with jaundice they feed from you like bloodsuckers, and you are wilting........ your breasts are drooping, weary of their tireless demands breathe sister........ l - l0, exhale......... leave this place, if only in a mindflight...... you wear the rubberstamp of womanhood inked with guilt and martrydom, is this really our birthright? break free and come along with me; i can show you the way inside there, the sea is calling now her waves form a bed under the moonlight, on her respite, lay your head now she is pleading with you, to save yourself..... won't you even acknowledge her existence? ********* to a tired homegirl in the sunshine state* [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (08-11-2003 04:52 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
this rings true for all of us Michele . . . breathe sister........ l - l0, exhale......... leave this place, if only in a mindflight...... ahh if only in a dream . . . beautiful plea xxoo |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I forgot to post a reply to this when you first posted.. Now I'm ashamed.. But this write is one of your best, and that's hard to say..since all of yours are astoundingly good.. I'm putting it in my library. |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
i need to take a deep breath after reading this and let it sink in..... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well said Michele....breathe sister breathe.  ~Summertime Smiles, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You poetry always tugs at the heart, just enough to make it want. Nice one girlie~ |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
break free and come along with me; i can show you the way inside there, the sea is calling now her waves form a bed under the moonlight, on her respite, lay your head now she is pleading with you, to save yourself..... Many a day I needed to do this when my kids were teens and my hubby was away on a business trip. Ahhhh!  Thank you for writing this. It is a great reminder to all women to take time for themselves. Hugs, Marti |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Michele - tell it like it is homegirl... BC |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Nice writing mish |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Reread it a few times and it truly is "girl" poem but not bad from the male perspective. |
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