Open Poetry #28 |
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She Lets it Pour all over Her |
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Martie
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She Lets it Pour all over Her Laughter was like hot confetti spilling from the sun into the grass. She could feel it bubble from her throat and burst there into summer. The hose was the season’s best toy, the conduit of joy snaked across the patio drenching the cement to cool, then into pails where she sat like a queen with a crown of wet curls. Behind her the sheets waved on the line and her mother hummed into a book, and even her brother bounced into a smile when he captured the waterfall and let it pour all over her. Now the girl is woman turning toward summer’s remarkable with her pails still full and overflowing with cool. That is the way she makes it past those days that dare to question, those days that stick to her like a sagging bathing suit, she lets it pour all over her. ---------- 3-23-01...with thanks to Michael (August) for the inspire |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
enjoyable read...thanks for sharin it I feel rain pouring down. I wait to rot away, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"The hose was the season’s best toy, the conduit of joy snaked across the patio drenching the cement to cool, then into pails where she sat like a queen with a crown of wet curls." Wonderful imagery Martie! Fantastic write...and so much enjoyed. ~Summertime Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Now the girl is woman turning toward summer’s remarkable with her pails still full and overflowing with cool. Martie~ Your insight is remarkable and complete. This reminds me of pink lemonade and summer vacations. Thank you for this picture postcard! ![]() |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh, I liked this very much...as I do all of your inspirational writes...Have missed Poet August too. There was something about the pails, the overflowing...the maturing of time like a bathing suite. Really good Marti. TD |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh, Martie, Martie, Martie, where's that book? You just have to publish one! Till then..into my library another of your wonders goes. hugs, Chris ![]() "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
That is the way she makes it past those days that dare to question, those days that stick to her like a sagging bathing suit, she lets it pour all over her. From unrestrained joy to coping with the lack... your vivid images pour over us in magic Martie words. *S* Lovely! *S* |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I enjoyed this very much.The imagery, the flow, and you amaze me everytime I read you. angelblueyes |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
dang...that felt SO good...again! |
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Janette![]()
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
I adored the imagery in this one oh so much. But as one woman to another, I just wish the darn bathing suit did not sag so much now. Fabulous ending! Yes pour it on! *big summer time smiles* always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is wonderful image rich, lyrical poetry. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beautiful and so very refreshing! Love, Margherita ![]() |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Dear sweet Martie, this is so good!! This ending just really set it off.... Now the girl is woman turning toward summer’s remarkable with her pails still full and overflowing with cool. That is the way she makes it past those days that dare to question, those days that stick to her like a sagging bathing suit, she lets it pour all over her. Thank you for posting this. It's beautiful, you know? ![]() Hugs ![]() Ethel |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Whatever's in those pails....I need it right now. Water? I'll take it. Happiness? Drench me. Kindness? Joy? Serenity? Knowing the source, it could be any or all of those. A beautiful way to say it, Martie.....thanks for bringing this back! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - thanks for the view of magic you give us with these wonderful images - Paul |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ I see it as clearly as if the photograph were here~ Poignant beauty, dear one~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
The imagery is remarkable! Martie, you paint the world like no other...I love this~ Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
![]() I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Smile. I came looking for this one today. I'd read it earlier--and I loved giggling free quality of it. I just came back to tell you so. That? And the place just doesn't look right without your name in the Today's Topic scroll. ![]() |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ditto Karen, and what an absolutely picture perfect drawing that was. So enjoyable Martie. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh martie, of all of your incredible writes, I think this is my favorite....after my car accident, my memory has faded so fast its not even fair, and this makes me wish for happy times to hang on to.....this is WONDER-FULL |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
strong imagery! well written! |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie...."..laughter....like hot confetti..." Excellent! Bob |
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