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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2003-08-09 01:11 PM

I am here among you, lost in remember
of passing moments,  of times yet to
be before my eyes.

I am there in the shadow of a great oak,
watching the sun in morning rise.

I am beating within your chest,  as blood
courses your every vein.

Lost in moments,   in unrest...of
struggles which I must restrain.

I am within your pen as ink flows tenderly upon
a fresh clean page.  Waiting to speak,
to take a walk...to have a moment's engage.

I am where the flowers bloom,  where daisies
and daffodils play.  The breeze that touches
your room,  the shadow lingering,  wanting
to stay.

I am ...  yes...  I am..

[This message has been edited by Magnus (08-09-2003 01:19 PM).]

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2003-08-09 01:16 PM

Nice, and especially:

the shadow lingering, wanting
to stay.

(The only critique I could make is the use of the word "courses" twice. A synonym for the 2nd one would strengthen this piece, I think.)

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2003-08-09 01:21 PM

Thanx Virginia, appreciate the input,
tweaked it a little in a couple of places.

Good Afternoon to ya!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2003-08-09 02:36 PM

Fantastic Barry, so nice to see you on these pages

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

4 posted 2003-08-09 03:00 PM

I am where the flowers bloom,  where daisies
and daffodils play.  The breeze that touches
your room,  the shadow lingering,  wanting
to stay.

I am ...  yes...  I am..

So nice...peaceful and reassuring.

Lovely thoughts, my friend.

Patricia

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-08-09 03:27 PM

I am within your pen as ink flows tenderly upon
a fresh clean page.  Waiting to speak,
to take a walk...to have a moment's engage.

I am where the flowers bloom,  where daisies
and daffodils play.  The breeze that touches
your room,  the shadow lingering,  wanting
to stay.

I am ...  yes...  I am..

Oh yes, Barry. So beautiful, it's almost song-like.
It's so good to see your presence here on these blue pages.
We miss you when you aren't.

Hugs to you, my friend

Ethel

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2003-08-09 05:00 PM

Wonderful Barry...
'I Am' so pleased to see my good bud here today!

~Summertime smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace~

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

7 posted 2003-08-09 06:39 PM

Hello Barry

This was so very lovely and I took great comfort from your words.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

8 posted 2003-08-09 07:55 PM

Hey Mag:

Very introspective...
You are always here in our collective thoughts, and hearts. TD

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

9 posted 2003-08-09 08:01 PM

All I can say is you certainly are.
Fantastic write.
Sandra

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2003-08-09 08:05 PM

Barry

You are here, in these pages of blue, and the hearts of the poets who read you, a friend to many. This is such a lovely poem, dear man, like you!

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

11 posted 2003-08-09 10:26 PM

Barry...You write so graceful. The words just flow like a gentle stream.
You are You are....a poet dear sir...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

12 posted 2003-08-09 10:48 PM

Barry,

I loved this....yes, by god, I am!

Susan

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

13 posted 2003-08-09 11:14 PM

...the voice of Inspiration...

-MVS

You CAN make a difference:
http://educate-yourself.org/

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

14 posted 2003-08-10 12:58 PM

So pretty this is! Falls on the ears like a whisper. Lovely as can be.

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

15 posted 2003-08-10 02:49 AM

damn, you make me wanna just hug your neck!

~sigh~

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

16 posted 2003-08-10 05:21 AM

And I am so glad you are
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

17 posted 2003-08-11 07:01 PM

nice

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

18 posted 2003-08-11 07:27 PM

very nice penning,,,
enjoyed the read,,,

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

19 posted 2003-08-11 07:32 PM

I am where the flowers bloom,

~*~

Yes. You are.

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

20 posted 2003-08-11 08:54 PM

Reads like a requiem (with all due respect).

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Kraw'

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

21 posted 2003-08-11 09:05 PM

Kraw....I must agree, and your's is quite
fine! Thanx...

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

22 posted 2003-08-11 10:11 PM

Barry, your words are as graceful as a swaying willow...

Linda

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