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(there ain't no fun without you now...so I guess I'll sleep)
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(there ain't no fun without you now...so I guess I'll sleep) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Quietly I roll it down the colors of my laughing legs weary feet to wriggle free-- beneath the black of pantyhose cherry red of sparkling painted on the nails of toes-- I should not have danced last night. The back is bad and I've grown old. Where's my pillow? Grant me sleep. may my mind tell stories bold-- flicker frames upon the lids of my eyes I shed the clothes spray the sheets with bergamot and hum the tunes of Norah Jones as I pray this silent prayer-- that I might dance in my dreams-- begging Gods I'll find you there. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (08-09-2003 07:53 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Shoot...and I just got here.  Enjoyed...as always! |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Serenity... This poem is sensuous and yet sad at the same time, to bad this guy didn't follow you home...I know I would have tried......:-) The poem has great form and rolls off the lips in fine rhythm, I like the line about spraying the sheets with bee-balm. Perhaps to sooth the stings of consciousness, and allow you to dance more freely in your dreams? *******ice******* |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Beautiful writing serenity, I really enjoyed the read  Andy |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K . . . wishing you sweet dreams Lady . . . always and awaking to my own creaking bones . . . *smile* xxoo |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
my anthem... cept -- I'm old enough -- sleep IS fun |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dancing, wherever, is always good |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"painted on the nails of toes--" Mine are red at the moment as well... "spray the sheets with bergamot" Bee balm?? What is that? And why don't I know about it?? "and hum the tunes of Norah Jones" Norah....sigh...got to love Norah...she was here in June and I didn't have anyone to go with...next time I am giving you a call Karen!! Beautiful writing...sad, lonely and still the love of old holds on... I feel you and send loving comfort your way.. Susan |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh geesh! Here I go...love to dance. And, whether it be in dreams or while awake the toes must have paint of cherry red!  Wonderful write...much enjoyed. ~Summertime smiles, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen...this just weeps of emptiness...I felt every word. May your dreams hold all the answers to your prayers. Dance... Love you, lady..  "My friends are my estate." |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Karen..I pray you do...sweet dreams  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, are you awake now? Hello??? I loved this poem, SereneOne, and I felt it, too. It had a longing in it for someone....I do hope that you found the someone in your dreams..  Hugs, my friend Ethel |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wake up "twinkle toes"!! Let's get all gussied up and go out and paint the town the same colour as our toenails! Shake your groove thing yaa yaaaaaa!!! Whew! Sorry, I don't know what came over me. I find strange things happen to my being when I read your writing Karen. But..that's a good thing.....ain't it? Love this. hugs to you, Chris |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I don't know what to say so I'll hug you There's nothing as unbreakable as the bond between an Arabian and her person |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - you write well ye swamp witch... BC |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Norah Jones is amazing...and so is your vivid thoughts for the pause at the end of your day.  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sighs and smiles. Guess who went out last night?  After the third shot of cuervo, I forgot all about my broken tooth. After the fifth? I forgot about the busted bone in me arse. Then after I lost count altogether, a biker friend "dipped" me while dancing, and it all came back to me. *wince* SO....guess who is back in retirement tonight?  And yes, I missed my baby too. (sneak attack, madviking  )And next time I go looking for my heart's desire, I think I'll go looking in my own hardrive.  Thanks for reading, and pass me the aspirin please... sigh. I really am too old for this shtuff. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity... I hope you had sweet dreams. You've got to quit hanging out with those biker guys, all the want to do is get you drunk and take you for a ride on their Harley...LOL...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
smile I missed you too but I am glad that you were treated like a queen somewhere other than your computer smiling you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
as I pray this silent prayer-- that I might dance in my dreams-- begging Gods I'll find you there. And did you? *S* Ah, lady... what a picture laughing legs paints... and then to end with this longing we all know. *S* Excellent!!! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Sad, but beautiful.By the way I love Norah Jones passing you the aspirin.angelblueyes |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Oh my witch, This tugs, it does...*smile* ~yeti |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Without women, there would be few bright lights in the world of men. Sorry you have to push this lesson so hard to learn it, but who amongst us has not said, "Never again god, if you please just get me through this." I had a friend long ago who wrote on the bottom of his toilet seat "Welcome back fool" just to remind him that he had been hugging the bowl before. At least you apparently made it home; I woke up (came to) once on a train hundreds of miles from home. Some "friends" thought it would be funny. It is a good poem and well written; thank you for sharing it. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Smiling at you, serenity...and how you can laugh at the pieces of your life, and still, make the ache so real and human. Thats one of the many reasons why so many find you amazing. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling at you all (especially icebox--wince at that practical "joke") I don't go out very often anymore--but when I do, I generally know the barowners, the band and at least twenty people in the crowd. I seem to have a team of people watching over me these days. sigh. It takes a village for me to party now. Thanks once more for reading. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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