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Braiding Poetry (A duet with Sunshine)
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Braiding Poetry (A duet with Sunshine) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Concertina-like, you sailed the sea, sowed the land, all, with your feet on the ground For you heard some music on the wind and the tinkle of your laughter hung the moon from starry skies ~ my father's search was over You looped my life wove me into your cloth and sat me up above the world. "Sing with the world, would you, my dear then whisper love notes kind tell me ever is in your heart and love me for what is mine" And I will love you for what you have suffered below these southern stars getting accustomed to me Still you dream your fantasies for me they sail the winds and love the seas you've never failed me, nor love's glory to regale me with never-ending stories. Now an accursed fate fallow lies in the pit of your breast, and you, terrified, trudge along with legs that fail the frail of you. My mind brings the young you back as my own hands braid our poetry even though we've lost the rhyme for time has skipped our heartbeats. I remember how you used to run among the leaves with hungry feet, how your peppercorn hair sprung and measured life after me... You always said heaven was but a step away my dearest heart, this, I know for I heard God whisper it so. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And I will love you for what you have suffered below these southern stars getting accustomed to me Still you dream your fantasies for me they sail the winds and love the seas you've never failed me, nor love's glory to regale me with never-ending stories. Now an accursed fate fallow lies in the pit of your breast, and you, terrified, trudge along with legs that fail the frail of you. My mind brings the young you back as my own hands braid our poetry even though we've lost the rhyme for time has skipped our heartbeats =============================== my oh mothy my... braiding poetry is right... strands of gold... girlies this is exquisite!! one of the loveliest blending of words and talents!!  "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
 A beautifull tale...insanity is not a crime |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
love the title and everything about it... I love this verse "For you heard some music on the wind and the tinkle of your laughter hung the moon from starry skies ~ my father's search was over" That title just won't leave me alone..I feel some inspiration tugging at my skirt  wonderful to see a duet by you two. ~A~ [This message has been edited by Alicethruglass (08-07-2003 09:47 AM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Beyond good.....this is beauty times two. When two voices like yours combine, it's simply a joy to read. Thanks to each of you for writing this, and thanks to both, since the combining creates a third personality with its own voice. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Light-poetry, as your souls shine through. Beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Exquisite blending, my friends...wonderful and wonderful!  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
entwined well...yall done good |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Both Lush AND Gorgeous-- wistful flower braiding here... just beautiful! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yegods! This is a beauty! The braiding of field flowers...yes Hugs to both Ed |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
for time has skipped our heartbeats. .....absolutely elegant writing, and just as stunning as both of you are. Lovely lovely work~!! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
And I will love you for what you have suffered below these southern stars Ladies...you have brought tears to my eyes with this treasure. Absolutely beautiful! Patricia |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
How did I miss this??? What a beautiful picture you two paint. I can easily imagine a mother carefully braiding her daughter's hair while telling her just how special she is and the daughter letting her mother knows how much she is loved. I could be wrong. But this is what I saw as I read. Loved this! ~Tier |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
How can you go wrong with two such talented writers and lovely ladies to boot? ye can't |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
My God, the angels singing to me in unison . . . what a beautiful gift this line is amazing: trudge along with legs that fail the frail of you. Beautiful Maree and Karilea just astounding xxoo |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Tier - when Maree and I decided to duet...our first obstacle was to find a theme, as usually poets need to have some common denominator with which they are familiar. [Before someone comes in here to say, what about "point/counterpoint"...there is that, too.] LOL...anyway, I have seen Maree write wonderful poetry of mothers, and motherhood...so tossed out to her a thought to that idea to get us kick-started. She glommed on to that idea and ran with it... we have both used the term "braiding" in past poetry - again, another common denominator. I was thrilled that I had her time, and talent, to mix up some words with her...she is an uncommonly remarkable poetess, and it was a good experience to fly high with her. I would suggest everyone here attempt a duet with that gal...she's very special! Thanks, everyone, for reading. We truly did enjoy our time! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
... O My ... O WOW ... Ah Well... running out of words now... Maree and Karilea, this was really great work... regards, Sudhir |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
beautiful just beautiful...h |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Lovely poem... You two did a good job together! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi poet friends, thank you all for stopping by and for all your lovely replies and compliments. I was so excited when Karilea and I were going to start our duet, that I didn’t know where to start LOL, even though we had had a plan. I know you have a lot of things on and happening Karilea but you always make time and I want to thank you for your time; you are a sensational poet and I’m honoured to have had the opportunity and experience dueting with you sunshinygirl and anytime you feel you’d like to again just SHOUT hehe. Hugs and love you Maree fate is not just |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hey Maree? I'm whispering let's do it again! [This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-11-2003 03:21 PM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Yes Sunshinygirl... we must!  |
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