Open Poetry #28 |
dreams I didn’t (the rhyme of "...n't') |
lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
dreams I didn’t behind this verse was what isn't... that you I'm looking at haunting me calling me to a bed soiled with dreams I didn't ask to see the two of us waiting at a hospital nigh unto the dawn for news that neither wants to and I shouldn’t have listened to those stillborn dreams looking past vacant eyes too shocked too tired to sleep or think & I couldn’t close my eyes and let remember fade and a new begin cause it somehow just wouldn’t let me |
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TasteOfOctober Member
since 2003-06-24
Posts 94 |
neat effect, and better for what's said. The only difference between the creative and the conformists is that the creative will not be conquered and the conformists already are. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
YOur words always speak volumes and great form. angelblueyes |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I really enjoyed the presentation and message of this poem. Dawn |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucky~ Oh my ... your thoughts catch me in their poignancy~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
A beautiful way to say this dream.....good to see, good to read. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Good Morning, Dale....Some dreams are so hard to dream, yet again. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
TasteOfOctober thank you, this was a lesson in the rhyme of "...n't" as I said. the story was of a time in my life back in '84 and the news was very sad to say the least. angelblue nice to see you again and thank you. DawnG glad youy enjoyed. Marge Tindal it's always nice to catch you sis. Ratleader glad to see your liking Ed means alot coming from you, Martie Yeah sis, some harder to write as am sure you know... much love to you all, now I can water and feed the foul before they they yell at me any more. dale [This message has been edited by Rosemary J. Gwaltney (08-07-2003 05:17 PM).] |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Oops, sorry 'bout that... I'll be glad when Rosemary's computer is out of the shop. dale |
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