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Appetite Lost
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Appetite Lost |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach 
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Appetite Lost ~~~~~~ . . . Our favourite table for two had been moved, setting me on early edge. Your chair wobbled as you sat making too obvious your imbalance. The rolls were as stale as our forced conversation. When I asked you for water to quench my thirst, You lifted the sweating pitcher to reveal a bold wine stain, ruining the once spotless tablecloth. As obvious as the scarlett smear of infidelity you thought my adoration would overlook. Awkwardly you knocked over my goblet. But, it had already been drained. Not only were you inept at having a discreet affair, You were also uneducated in erasing moral blemishes. So much for dessert.... Check please!!! . . . Chris Barker ~~~~~~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
IF you had stayed for dessert, it sounds as if a Decadent Sin Chocolate Cake would have been in order... I liked this, Chris! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ouch Chris and even worse I most definately can relate to this one....poignant writing sweetie, good to read you again although so sad. You nailed this one Chris... I must have had my momma's will |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Chris, I'm so sorry your entree tasted so bland and sour, dearest friend, you deserve so much more saffron and so much less salt! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ooooohhhh...this one really touched my heart, Chris.... and it hurt. I'm so glad things aren't like this for you anymore. You are too sweet, my friend, to be treated like this. Well, nobody should be, actually. Well, you know what I mean, sweet lady. Now I'm beginning to ramble again. This was a very good write, Chris.  Hugs  Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (09-20-2003 02:37 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yes, I know what it is like to lose my appetite as well--Unfortunately, far too many of us will identify with your slice of painful reality. Well done! Linda |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hi Chris.. You know how very much I can identify with this piece. Very profound heartfelt write. ~Love & Miss ya, Teed~
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
 Hugs my friends! |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Ain't it the truth. When one spreads rumors and lies about the other, and makes a public spectacle..it's no longer discreet is it? Shara~ Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! [This message has been edited by SharaRose (09-20-2003 03:58 PM).] |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Painful, but very good.I hope this pain is gone from your life.Nicely written and honest.My favorite kind of write. Jason |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Chris...a profound write with vivid images to create the metaphor...awesome indeed!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Shara, Jason & scorpio, thankyou for reading and commenting. hugs! Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore |
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