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jellybeans
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0 posted 2003-08-06 05:51 PM

        so shall you knock and it will be opened 
          
           Hatred and hurt -- the darkness and I 
              hand in hand we shoved every  
                glimmer deep down under  
                   I shudder to drag them  
                        from obscurity's 
 And                         blanket                         And  
    what                                                       what
       of                                                        of
          dreams                                    hopes
           shall I resurrect the long ago buried
                    and bring them out of  
                           the darkness
                               into the 
                                  light

                    
    How shall I take down                                                       the           w
                                          the                                        leaving           a
    What if I don't                 wall                                        it                        l
      like what                        it                                    scale                         l
    I find I have                    took                                 to                                 i
       hidden                          so                              best                                   n
       inside?                     many                          be                                            t
                                      years                       not                                               a
                                           to                     it                                                       c
                                       build               might                                                        t          
dare I 
      leave my battle 
                       scarred security 
                                            behind 
                                                   dare I chance
                                                                  a walk out into  the                      light         ?

I was helping on some html and finally figured out how to post this, and so even though its technically a repost, just wanted to do it cause I couldn't get before *jb smile*

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (08-08-2003 10:18 AM).]

SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~

1 posted 2003-08-06 06:13 PM

Walking into the light seems like a scary journey to breaking down the walls. All the best to you.

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

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in the shadows

2 posted 2003-08-06 06:42 PM

The visual is interesting, but the poem already is a powerful piece.

Patricia
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since 2003-04-06

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3 posted 2003-08-06 06:45 PM

I dare...for when light comes darkness must go. His light brings truth which guides our way. I know.

I am keeping this JB...if you don't mind! Awesome write unfolding in a wonderful image on the page.

Hugs,
Patricia

Martie

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4 posted 2003-08-06 07:02 PM

Jellybeans..I enjoyed this format, although I found it distracted a bit from gathering meaning from the poem...which is profound.

Sunshine

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5 posted 2003-08-06 07:19 PM

I remember when we were doing a lot of graphical art with our words...somewhere around here I have a waterfall...heaven help me, don't know what I named it.

The words packed a punch, m'dear...a good read for all...

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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6 posted 2003-08-06 08:01 PM

JB - this is amazing!
Glad you reposted, I never saw it.
Not only are the words brilliant
but the execution is essential here
I am in awe, truly
(can you tell me how to do this please)
xxoo

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

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7 posted 2003-08-06 09:07 PM

JB, I love the way you did this.
I know it took a lot of work. It was
very interesting to read. I love the
poem, too.

Hugs

Ethel

Marge Tindal

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8 posted 2003-08-06 10:02 PM

JellyGirl~
Impact ! I just felt total impact from this beautiful presentation~

Word-walking across my heart here~
GORGEOUS !!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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jellybeans
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9 posted 2003-08-07 02:37 PM

thank you all, I was just so happy to get the html to post correctly that I actually forgot the poem had a purpose...lol...
no really glad you liked

Ratleader

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10 posted 2003-08-07 11:31 PM

This looks very much like some of the tan-lines I saw in Hawaii....but with colors reversed........

This is excellent -- I've got to learn how this is done, so I can do nifty concrete poetry too....

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passing shadows
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11 posted 2003-08-07 11:54 PM

damn

suthern

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12 posted 2003-08-08 02:01 PM

Yes... you dare. *S*

This is a powerful presentation, lady... great job! *S*

jellybeans
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13 posted 2003-08-08 02:18 PM

RL, thank you, I really couldn't say how, I have only written a couple like this, and the words just seem to lend themselves to the form....now the actual posting and the html, would be happy to help you with that if you need some

PS, thank you lady

suthern yeppers, already did *smile*, wrote this one in the 'indecision' phase...sigh, thank you lady

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