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ChickyPoo
Junior Member

since 2003-09-17

Posts 10

0 posted 2003-09-18 12:12 PM

Please Mommy don't leave me here
I may not be real, but I seen to fear
That no one will find me, no one will care
For many years I shall stare
Into the blue fairy's eyes, in hopes to be
A real boy, you shall see.

I will come back, with my arms open wide
And into your loving embrace I shall no longer hide
For I will be alive, things will be the same
You will love me always, no longer will I feel shame.
But...I must ponder, will you leave me again
To fend for myself, in the great wide open?

I may not have senses, muscles, or blood
But if I were real, the tears would flood
Down my innocent face, salty to taste
To know that my time with you was a waste
Of your precious moments with your "son"
I had hopes that I was the only one
That you could love, and hold, and share
Our lives together, but you don't care.

Your leaving me here to suffer the loss
Of my time with my Mommy, my love has been tossed
Away with my giggles, the good times and bad
Don't you recognize Mommy the joy that we had.
Please rethink your decision to flee
For I will be real one day, you'll see.

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

1 posted 2003-09-18 02:02 AM

Oh wow this aches.This reminds me of the movie AI.
Crystal

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

2 posted 2003-09-18 03:49 AM

It reminded me, too, of AI...I watched that last night...liked this.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2003-09-18 04:27 AM

Nice writing...James

ChickyPoo
Junior Member

since 2003-09-17

Posts 10

4 posted 2003-09-18 06:42 AM

Thanks guys!! I watched the movie, and the message was just stuck in my head, so I felt the need to express it. This poem can be interpreted in many different ways. One of my friends thought it reminded them of abortion, and they were able to relate to it in that fashion.

Thanks for the feedback

[This message has been edited by ChickyPoo (09-18-2003 07:30 AM).]

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2003-09-18 10:34 AM

ChickyPoo - very expressive writing, excellent...

BC

ChickyPoo
Junior Member

since 2003-09-17

Posts 10

6 posted 2003-09-18 03:14 PM

Thanks! That's the wonderful aspect of poetry; it gives yourself the opportunity to express yourself to the fullest ability

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