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Endurance
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Endurance I heard your voice, the sound not so old of friend, drowning me in yesterday thoughts despite the pounding that change brings behind these closed eyes. A never satisfied kiss grips me in my dreams, daring me, playing with my heart, but safely as I awake to truth, and emptiness and unscented candles dripping their light. I am abused, my words punishing me daily in a silence only I can conceive, my teeth clenched, my lips frozen waiting for the darkness to lift and my crumpled thoughts to be smoothed. I've cheated myself, visualized more than could be captured in a moment of you and am left bruised by the experience like a peach, that has been handled and pinched between thumb and fingers, left there... its skin still bright but beneath, the damage already done. Spoiled, that's me, hiding within, having had it all once, wondering if ever I would chance upon it again in more than dreams, and as I wait the pounding's resistance eases, the pain is minimized and I return to you and sleep. "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (09-17-2003 04:49 PM).] |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Definitely one of your best. This exudes relate in an exquisite word-flow and soul-pour. Beautiful. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
A never satisfied kiss grips me in my dreams, daring me, playing with my heart, but safely you break through the density of emotions, with a reality full of character and theme... Very much enjoyed and top of the morning to ya |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Spoiled, that's me, hiding within, having had it all once, wondering if ever I would chance upon it again in more than dreams, and as I wait the pounding's resistance eases, the pain is minimized and I return to you and sleep. Oh, Maureeen...this one really hurts!!  Hugs, my friend  Ethel |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I am abused, my words punishing me daily in a silence only I can conceive, my teeth clenched, my lips frozen waiting for the darkness to lift and my crumpled thoughts to be smoothed. I've cheated myself, visualized more than could be captured in a moment of you and am left bruised by the experience like a peach, that has been handled and pinched between thumb and fingers, left there... it's skin still bright but beneath, the damage already done. agree with Mark..one of your best.. honest..angst filled self introspection..with a tinge of bitterness perhaps with yourself and others for not meeting the expectations...if only of a dream.. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
This is really well done. I love it! You really captured raw energy and feeling in this one. Keep it up! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
M. some very powerful feelings written within. Dreams can be so frustrating at times and yet so satisfying at other times. Given the chance, I think I would live in the dream and accept the frustrations that I would experience. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Spoiled, that's me, hiding within, having had it all once, wondering if ever I would chance upon it again" It's a day by day process, isn't it? I hope tomorrow is a good day. Susan  |
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