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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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I know, you have denied me. I haven't earned your love. One letter tells a million apologies, but I am only one. Trust takes all the dignified ways to go, to take away the part of the pain.. that you alone have caused. It isn't like me, to feel guilt for what I'm not at fault.. Nor let you make me, for what you've mistakenly lost. I haven't seen the sun in weeks, eyes have lightened to the taste of winter. You have denied me, given no fair chance or reason.. Traitor.. You bend not for the flowers. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ouch |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
wow It isn't like me, to feel guilt for what I'm not at fault.. Nor let you make me, for what you've mistakenly lost. Honey, wow, all I can say is, all emotions come to terms and will find you and him answers, and hopefully in a good, peaceful and kind way.... Your poems are so full of caring words...struggling at times, but so caring. Many hugs sent your way and thank you for writing and sharing. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Eloquent with an ending line of impact. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
It's worse when your not given a choice... Loved it Meg! Susan |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
'the taste of winter'--evocative line. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I know this well. Your words resound. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
I haven't seen the sun in weeks...nice, nor have I. Jason |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
Meg- "It isn't like me, to feel guilt for what I'm not at fault.. Nor let you make me, for what you've mistakenly lost" absoutly beautiful words here, loved it "For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I haven't seen the sun in weeks, eyes have lightened to the taste of winter. You bend not for the flowers. ouch and wow Absolutely love the above lines best. A fantastic write. Maree  fate is not just |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
truth...written in all its painful splendor! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Strong, you are. Neither beauty nor happiness is possible without that. The ability to express both so well is icing on the cake. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Meghan, you've done it again. In a few short lines, you've spilled emotions that many people bottle up. Nicely written, though I can feel the hurt. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Hurt but with a statement of strength and power at the end. Crystal |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
your last lines...ouch. but me...I like to squash the flowers when I am in a bad mood  so...yeah And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
You have denied me, given no fair chance or reason.. Traitor.. You bend not for the flowers. I'm so glad you can say it, because i feel like i dont know how anymore. this is stunning. i know every word you write of. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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