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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-09-16 09:55 PM

This morning, a cardinal
Lay at my doorstep
As if he had died, trying
To enter this shack

Dressed in hues of desire
And dull as this yearning
He lay there before me
And told me a tale

That he was drawn before sunrise
To this spot in the darkness
By the wails of our wanting
And the long pleas of longing

Compelled to the window
By our cries of completion
He impacted the glass
Above our slow-cooling bodies

And suffered, it seems
His own “Petite Morte”

Sacrificed to the notion of love
He left us his gift of the wings
The feathers of flight
That held him aloft, drove him along

So, half of them, I give to you
That we each may devise
Our own Icarus wings

"In looking Northward, I see a light"

[This message has been edited by wranx (09-16-2003 10:15 PM).]

Sunshine

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1 posted 2003-09-16 09:58 PM

Tomorrow
when the red bird
sings outside my window
I will dry my eyes
and come back
to respond
as I should.

Martie

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2 posted 2003-09-16 10:01 PM

Ed...for some reason this poem made me cry...for all that is and for all that is not...and just because you said it so well!

Ratleader

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3 posted 2003-09-16 10:03 PM

If this were golf, you'd be on your way to a score of 18.......

Excellence, Ed

Ed

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vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2003-09-16 10:07 PM

Oh my, Ed...

This had me in tears after the first few
lines and then smiling through them at the end.
Only you could take the death of a bird, and turn it
into something so absolutely beautiful.

What beauty, this, my friend...
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2003-09-16 10:11 PM

Thanks friends, I wanted this to be better, less disjointed....But? t'will have to do.

Midnitesun

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Gaia

6 posted 2003-09-16 10:16 PM

I'll keep this one in my loft, so if you change it, I'll know.

I should be so 'disjointed' in my thoughts and writes.

this IS poetry

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2003-09-16 10:19 PM

stunning...

I am simply stunned.

I read this while listening to Clarinet Concerto, Second Movement, (Mozart) (Coincidentally, ?smile? that is the last concerto he ever wrote...)

If you don't have it, I will have to send it to you.

I would love to give you something back for this.

Beautiful.

brian sites
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8 posted 2003-09-16 10:41 PM

Sacrificed to the notion of love
He left us his gift of the wings
The feathers of flight
That held him aloft, drove him along

So, half of them, I give to you
That we each may devise
Our own Icarus wings

damn dude.....
one of your best ......

angelblueyes
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9 posted 2003-09-16 10:43 PM

This is definetly beautiful.I wish some of my thoughts came like this.

Crystal

Dark Angel
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10 posted 2003-09-17 02:25 AM

Sacrificed to the notion of love
He left us his gift of the wings
The feathers of flight
That held him aloft, drove him along

So, half of them, I give to you
That we each may devise
Our own Icarus wings

Oh my Ed...this is superb, this is absolutely beautiful.

only you can do this m'friend.

one of your best.

Keeping it.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Sunshine

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11 posted 2003-09-17 06:31 AM

Better? Remind me
to take out some
stock in
Kleenex.

Janet Marie
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12 posted 2003-09-17 08:29 AM

Dressed in hues of desire
And dull as this yearning
=================

That he was drawn before sunrise
To this spot in the darkness
By the wails of our wanting
And the long pleas of longing

Compelled to the window
By our cries of completion
He impacted the glass
Above our slow-cooling bodies
===============================
Sacrificed to the notion of love
He left us his gift of the wings
The feathers of flight
That held him aloft, drove him along

So, half of them, I give to you
That we each may devise
Our own Icarus wings
=================================

one of the most unique writes I've read in awhile...exceptionally conceived.
very well done poet sir.

"If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ...
Lightning strikes and all you see is blue ... this is me missing you"

JH

Susan Caldwell
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13 posted 2003-09-17 09:25 AM

"Sacrificed to the notion of love
He left us his gift of the wings
The feathers of flight
That held him aloft, drove him along"

Just the notion?

Susan

Midnitesun

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14 posted 2003-09-17 11:27 AM

I couldn't stay away from this one, Ed.
This one MUST be printed and framed, with cardinal red matting and a genuine custom made wood frame to match the beauty of the write.

mysticpoe
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15 posted 2003-09-17 11:47 AM

He left us his gift of the wings. I like this line, not quite sure why yet. But it seems to comes from the windings, of that which is to be. Nice Ed.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

littlewing
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16 posted 2003-09-17 12:55 PM

How hot the Sun
melted
days of past
drip-dropping
cascades of molten tears
imprinted eternal
beneath me
falling
to my own death
My demise . . .

It seems
I was this fragile creature
determined and dutiful
chasing the light
finding the dark
of reality
Shedding my feathers
in nakedness of purity
for those I loved
and love

I now hold
within my hands
Crimson remnants
of you to me
transcended
beyond this plane
Not of this Earth
but of . . .

I bow, humbly
to the heavens
rejoicing in such gift
bittersweet beauty
and gather feathers
lying about my feet
carefully constructing them
from one life given
selflessly
in order to create
one life for two

This is the most touching and eternal
bit of your soul I am so grateful
to witness . . .
Edward Rose, you are one beautiful man
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (09-17-2003 01:03 PM).]

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

17 posted 2003-09-17 01:00 PM

When all the superlatives have been used..
may I simply say..
thank you for this masterpiece poet sir.
~Soft smiles, Nancy~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

suthern

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18 posted 2003-09-17 01:28 PM

He left us his gift of the wings
The feathers of flight
That held him aloft, drove him along

This isn't just one of YOUR best I've read... it's one of THE best I've read...

Nightshade

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just out of reach

19 posted 2003-09-17 01:35 PM

wranx - you are amazing!! This is for certain a

and I am keepin' it! hugss, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
Emily Dickinson

arthur
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20 posted 2003-09-17 02:31 PM

so you opened the door and there was a father of the church laid out gasping from frustrated sexual need

well its novel anyway -i@ll give you that
arthur

Corinne
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state of confusion

21 posted 2003-09-17 07:42 PM

Ah! You tricked me! I saw a Cardinal at first, not a bird! hahaha! Sweet, sweet poem, btw.

Core

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

22 posted 2003-09-17 10:44 PM

Thanks again! Good lord, my favorite people are all here...

And Darlin'
I see that you've received your half of his gift to us.
Your poem above.....your gift to me.

littlewing
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23 posted 2003-09-18 01:24 AM

yes . . . and hold them dear to my heart
thank you sweety

Dark Angel
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24 posted 2003-09-18 01:41 AM

You're beautiful.. both of you

M

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

bsquirrel

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25 posted 2003-09-18 06:51 PM

Finding the sun
in yrselves.

Awesome write, wranx.

Earth Angel
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26 posted 2003-09-18 07:23 PM

When I read the title, I thought I was in for a religious experience--and I was...

Linda

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