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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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is it breeding or conditioning that wears instinct to bone and leaves me aching for the right words? what good are prayers in a mind where gods fear to tread where everything I've ever done and everything I'll ever be feels wrong? sleep will not come questions rape the silence of a lonely room no apologies or explanations left nights like these make it harder to breathe |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"sleep will not come questions rape the silence of a lonely room no apologies or explanations left nights like these make it harder to breathe" I've known those nights...and yes they do. Very well said, Raph. Hugs, ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"is it breeding or conditioning that wears instinct to bone and leaves me aching for the right words? what good are prayers in a mind where gods fear to tread where everything I've ever done and everything I'll ever be feels wrong? sleep will not come questions rape the silence of a lonely room no apologies or explanations left nights like these make it harder to breathe" ~ Honestly, Raph, I read your poem several times. You can write "heavy" like no other. I think I need to take a happy pill so I can go to sleep with a smile on my face--that way my dreams are sweet. lol BTW, If you would like some happy pills, I'll give you some. They might work. I find them quite helpful at times.  You certainly can write well! It is so raw, so real, so solar plexus grabbing! Loving, healing hugs, Linda |
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Bonfirelight Member
since 2003-06-19
Posts 85London, England |
thats wicked. cheers |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yes cheers, have one on me and kick out the demons for the night |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks demons in full force lately |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ohh so hard to breathe . . . thick stale pungent air . . . everything I'll ever be feels wrong? you know Raph . . . it always will until one day (whenever that is) everything just goes "CLICK" loved this xxoo |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Sometimes for me..it is the daytime that I find hardest to take a deep breath. Your thoughts invade mine my friend. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
For some reason, I hear Jim Morrison belting out these words, and that's a compliment, my friend...(a big Doors fan here)...I like this, it has substance! ~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~S~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Damn!
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
well Sue i've heard the snap but not the click so far Chris all hours of the day all hours..hugs Sunnyone a compliment indeed trust me huuuuuuuge fan here too Nancy grins thanks |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
this is one of your best! your talent is really amazing.... Lauren~ The way you move me |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ohh...I feel this. its like you can't sleep because..well I'm not sure why. the mysterious untreatable illness. where we scream at ourselves and are left with silence..it gets scary. of course...part of my reason is becasue I think they're you to get me  ahhh yes..the doors. people are strange... that why i larve u And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Embrace the questions, Ae, else they will linger on to haunt you . . . "Be patient toward all that is unsolved in your heart and try to love the questions themselves... Do not now seek the answers, which cannot be given to you because you will not be able to live them. And the point is, to live everything. Live the questions now. Perhaps you will then gradually, without noticing it, live along some distant day into the answer." Rainer Maria Rilke "Letters To A Young Poet" Kraw' |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Listen to Krawdad, he knows his onions! sound advice. this write, suffocates, shivers, the thought of wearing instinct away gave me the creeps.you sound mental and sane at the same time, nicely done. what good are prayers in a mind where gods fear to tread I know yer not losing yer marbles, from this alone. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Have a little dialogue...I know there's a voice inside that will answer back (you know what I mean) that inner voice..listen to your inner being, and when it accuses you ask it why,, if it gives legit answers then work on them. Sort of like a re-evaluation, or taking inventory. No one's perfect so why should you be? Sounds as if you are the hardest on yourself. I don't know that, but it sure seems that way. Also darkness can't survive in the light. They don't mix. Hope things get better for you. And as for being so dark that no gods would tread..who hasn't been?  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Lauren means alot coming from you I lubba you too Liz grins..sleep...sleep Krawdad i know you're right of course, patience wears and in those moments of weakness these writes come. Thank you gemma you've known me for awhile surely you know the marbles are long gone no? grins my inner voice just ends up arguing with the other voices and then i can't get any sleep but thanks Shara for the read |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Caro Raffaele, tu sei un poeta fantastico! Great poetic performance! But I am sorry you feel like this …. may the sun break through! It always does! Abbracci. Margherita  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
what good are prayers in a mind where gods fear to tread where everything I've ever done and everything I'll ever be feels wrong? maybe there is something that must be done or changed? I dunno, but I do know that your writes are amazingingly penetrating filled with emotion and utterly honest, showing your caring heart craves a purity of sorts, an understanding. Bless you and your muse, may you never stop penning |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
sorry - the snap . . . I actually smiled at that (goodness, I need help) but yes, I know snap is wayy easier than the click |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
sorry that my magic wand is broken... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Aenimal - nights such as these haunt the soul, you write of them well... BC |
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