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Vertigo |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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Ink in bleed of downward flowing madness growing with the knowing endless spiral down down Spin around and catch a moment quickly fleeting no repeating time gone Summer answers Autumn's calling fragments falling no forestalling fall fall Spin again in dizzy twirling silver sterling bites the bullet Whole... ~Vicky L. Raynes When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace. -Jimi Hendrix [This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-16-2003 03:12 AM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
terrific write vicky,, i enjoyed the flow,, |
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Bonfirelight Member
since 2003-06-19
Posts 85London, England |
Great rhythm. like the wordplay. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dang it! You KNEW I'd get dizzy reading this! Why did I even click?    |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Spin around and catch a moment quickly fleeting no repeating whirling , twirling, yes it feels like this as its leaving, doesn it? great perception of it all in this very creative poetry |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
 ...I'm dizzy, but I like it... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
vlraynes Wonderful write my dear.  |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
hmm... bites the bullet...whole. falling, falling. Like it's all going to pot, and all we can do is ride it out, and bite the bullet - whole. All of it. For we're all in it - together. Nice wake-up write. Enjoyed. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Summer answers Autumn's calling fragments falling no forestalling ==================== ahhh...alliterations and rhyme... the moth is giddy  love your word play and creativity in this piece Vicky-girl..a unique, clever write. Vertigo is me middle name lol  "If you hear teardrops falling like rain on the rooftops ... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Hey Vic . . . this made me see your words flowing off the page and leaves from the air . . . looking up to see them dripping from the sky Beautiful writing, amazing flow xxoo |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh my...I'm glad I was sitting down when I read this!!! It amazes me how you combined the words with the format in such a way as to leave me with a falling effect as I read! All I can say is Brilliant!!!! I love your work, as there is always something innovative and imaginative waiting there to see!!! ~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~S~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Vicky! Even though I do tend to get dizzy easily.  Reminded me of leaves spinning down from the trees. Expertly penned. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh my gosh, I too got my head spinning reading this, sweet friend, it felt like a carousel ride for the leaves on the trees, yay! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, here in Colorado the leaves are still green but I can't wait till the colors shine, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vicky, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Vicky, you really know how to (verti)go, with the flow... Very clever, and well written! Richy |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
 Beautiful write Mum Life isn't really all that bad... just don't take it too seriously |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
VickyBud~ Hey ... I buy that at the drugstore ... L'Oreal #9~ Excellent workmanship, lady swirl~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Such a touch you show in this one, blending form and meaning so well that the poem itself is art, not just the words. I am so glad I read this, because in addition to enjoying, I found a lesson in the craft. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
The words and the flow were awesome. Crystal |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky..I'm so glad this came back up ...since I missed it before. What a great feel it has!  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Vicky, this does come very close to making my head spin..... Very nicely done.... |
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