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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach 
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 . . . The man across the street is drinking again I wanted to tell him how lovely his garden looked after all of his hard work. But, he wouldn't listen... not now. I wanted to show him the pictures I took of his grandchildren perched proudly upon his lap that Sunday at his birthday celebration. But, he wouldn't be interested... not now. The man across the street is drinking again I wanted to explain why his sweet wife would not be coming home for a few days, and why his dogs are hiding behind the couch - eyes full of fear trying so hard not to piddle. But, he wouldn't care... not now... The man across the street makes birdhouses and tells the best stories, helps out all the neighbours - But not now... no... not right now. . . . Chris Barker September 2003 ~~~~ |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Chris, this is so sad. Drinking sure messes up alot of things. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
I know 3 people like this, and you never forget it. They do leave their mark on your life, that is for sure. This write rang alot of familiar bells for me. All the things you said you want to do...do them, because they were nice things, but I know what you mean...there are better times to do it.  Shara @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh Chris, this really touched my heart. So many let alchohol and drugs ruin the happy times in their lives. Sometimes until they're gone completely. So Sad.  Hugs to you, sweet lady, Ethel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Chris...these are 'just thoughts'? If so, you should be jotting your thoughts down constantly.. because this is you at your best! Very real, very intimate a portrait you painted...of a sad, sick, soul. Excellent and profound write! ~Hugs, luv and miss ya, Teed~ *Thanks again for the 'no reason' call, I needed it today*  ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Aww...thanks you guys. I just hate seeing a wonderful person dissolve into a mumbling mess all because of alcohol or drugs. Such a waste of a special spirit. hugs! |
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Chrissypooh Member
since 2002-02-19
Posts 80Canada |
Excellent and profound write! Christine  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Excellent write Chris.....yes, sad it is. behind the alcohol often times lies a very troubled mind. Struggling every day with their problem. You probably cannot count the number of times they said "this is the last one, no more"..... IF they ever understand what is causing them to reach out for something that numbs what ails them (mentally)...and can face their demons....they can win... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A most interesting picture to display with such concise wording...who hasn't been in this scenario - seeing, hearing, knowing, not being able to do anything; and when they are logical and sober - do they even remember? Not right now... Oh Chris...your muse is wonderful! The puppy must have been sleeping! Good puppy! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Christine - Hello! Thankyou! hugs. Magnus - yes, tis a sad situtation all round. thankyou for your comments Karilea - Dear lady .. thankyou so much. I think this puppy - Meeka - just might be part "muse." lol. hugs! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I can so understand this.I can remmeber when we were young and my father was like this.Well penned. Crystal |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thanks so much for reading and commenting angelblueyes. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Chris - excellent write, I read a lot of sadness in it... BC |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Most insightful write,Chris... believe in what your heart feels... |
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MissRhyme New Member
since 2003-09-15
Posts 3Ajax, Ontario, CANADA |
This poem is very creatively written and written with much heart. It hit very close to heart for me as I have a brother who is very much like this man you wrote about. Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem. Joan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Chris, Every scale has a balance, good write enjoyed.  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
As an innocent by-stander, the madness of this experience was so gently portrayed. We become the watchers...wondering if soon the time will come for healing. Wonderful write. TD |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Chris, I also don't understand why people drink alcohol and smoke, sweet friend, if it doesn't taste good, if it doesn't summon the Gods, and if it is terrible for your body and leaves your body vulnerable to cancer and other diseases, I find it utterly ridiculous why people would even think of beginning it! (wipes tears) That to me is like a half-suicide and I find it selfish how people destroy themselves like that, my heart goes out to all doing this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
 All of my Passion's friends!! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
sad topic, excellent words |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Chris This was so well done, and compassionately real. Too often I have been touched by just this kind of scene with people that are important to me. Sad, how alcohol feels like it's hiding pain, and yet it is also locking out love. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
This is just one of the many reasons that the smell of alcohol makes ne sick to my stomach. I wish people could get it... Excellent write. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Raph - Thankyou so much.  Martie - Dear poetess, thankyou for taking the time to read and comment. This is "real" and I have tried talking to this person more than once....always adding that he is loved. A sad scene I can witness quite easily from my computer station. hugs! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Alyssa - turns my stomach as well! Thankyou for your comments and hugs to you. |
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