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What Fell Sunrise Offering
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What Fell Sunrise Offering |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Soothe me oh Sol, That I might not be found frozen From nights closed eyed journey And frigid hand that gripped my heart To leave me feeling so much less Than I am. She paraded across the dim lit stage Her gown laced with sequin stars That promised false tender Instead leaving this chill To make fragile my soul. Grace me warm one With a smile that touches my throat Bared as it is for winter blade Or caress By your fingers, comforting, In follow of hollow places Needing mend Will you rise with me Or is after all, this, The leave of turning fall? |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow -- quite a ride, this one! Every line a little surprise.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
I rarely comment on your poems, because I'm always left wondering what I could possibly say. They say it all on their own. Thank you for the read. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful! ~Hugs~ |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Keeper......you know how I feel about your words....another "wish I had written that"...  Lauren~ The way you move me |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...You dig deep with a thought-filled shovel.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile... Thanks for showing me the light. I won't tell anybody how sweet you are either. Nope. Your secret is safe with me.  Awesome Captain Poet Dude. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You paint nearly always with a hint of charcoal, friend, a touch of gray into the picture of fall's colors. A cloud across the sun. Corinne |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
In reply - what would a painting be without contrast?  Corinne |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
mmmeeeeeelllltinnngg...okie yeah that WAS supposed to be the wicked witch but in all seriousness...my frozen heart methinks is melting...*giggles* If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Grace me warm one With a smile that touches my throat Bared as it is for winter blade Or caress By your fingers, comforting, In follow of hollow places Needing mend Will you rise with me Or is after all, this, The leave of turning fall?" Your thoughts are following me again. I was attempting to put this very thing to word earlier tonight. Thanks for reminding me why I'm here bud. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"She paraded across the dim lit stage Her gown laced with sequin stars That promised false tender Instead leaving this chill To make fragile my soul. Grace me warm one With a smile that touches my throat Bared as it is for winter blade Or caress By your fingers, comforting, In follow of hollow places Needing mend" You're awesome, Ron...ya know that? This is incredibly beautiful, my friend. Wonderfully done. Hugs, ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ron~Thank you for always showing the other side... Susan |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You are brilliant, even within the dark shadowed thoughts. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron, good God you do write with such beauty as other do not see . . . xxoo |
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