Open Poetry #28 |
stormsweep |
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Faith drains away In rivulets of pain I leave façade of shelter Embrace the icy rain The scorch and sizzle Stink as lightning flashes But flesh survives Only dreams are ashes I time my screams To coincide with thunder But with none to hear I am left to wonder Why I stand in storm Just to hide these tears That empty my heart As hope disappears |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very touching write,,,
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh my, suthern girl...such emotion in this, such despair. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Why I stand in storm Just to hide these tears That empty my heart As hope disappears" I felt every word ~ every line... EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (09-11-2003 10:48 AM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
HeyYou~ This is just too too sad~ Pretty expressive, but soooooo sad~ Me wub you, bunches and bunches~ *HUGLETS* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Well written gal...some times wind from storms will dry tears?....or, you can always take a few more number three's?....Love the way you can make the words do your thoughts |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, dearest friend, this deeply touched my heart and I hope all is well with you as I send angel hugs your way to chase the storm away and let the rainbows shine upon you with faith again! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Suthern, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
QjQ: Thank you very much! *S* Martie: Then poem reflects poet. *S* Thank you! EA: You always do... and I thank you! *S* Marge: You know your 'wub' makes me smile... thank you! *S* Toerag: I hadn't thought of it that way... but one can hope? *S* (so hustle up, wind... do your thing! *S*) Thank you so much! *S* M'toe: You are a dear... and I thank you! *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Faith drains away In rivulets of pain I leave façade of shelter Embrace the icy rain The scorch and sizzle Stink as lightning flashes But flesh survives Only dreams are ashes ========================= you know my feelings about "pity party" replies....but sometimes a poem hurts to read and then it seems wrong to compliment it's poetic qualities... I read this earlier today and was at a loss...still seem to be so I will just let you know I was here... and you know that I know that you know I know. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
sorry...AOL hiccuped. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (09-11-2003 08:21 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"I time my screams To coincide with thunder But with none to hear I am left to wonder" And all the rest of it! This is utterly beautiful, Laura....in spite of the biting sadness and doubt in it. This one is going directly to my library....seems like you just get better and better. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Ruth, Because you know...this too shall pass. I wish faith, joy and love for you dear friend. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh, I do know this...hugs and prayers sent |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JM: And I'm just a pity party animal these days. *G* Thank you, ma'am... be careful with those hiccups. *S* Ratleader: I think you're reading through very kind eyes, sir... but I'm sure grateful for them. Thank you so much! *S* Larry: One can hope. *S* Thank you very much. *S* PS: Accepted and appreciated. *S* Thank you so much! *S* |
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