Open Poetry #28 |
Poseidon Sleeps |
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Poseidon sleeps and so do I resting, snuggling enclosed in the arms of the deeps. Caressed by the rise and fall of the tides in swell like the sea people are caressed by the sands and the weed of the ocean. Sighs of contentment surround me and I sway gently to the music that encloses me in opalescent wonder; dreaming deep dreams and knowing salted kisses, as the king holds me in his arms No trident formed tempest below me no hand of salvation to subdue the contentment that washes over me. I will rest for a while and then move on taking my dreams and my dance to another place while Poseidon sleeps. And I smile forever - locked in the embrace of Davy Jones who holds my hand eternally where Poseidon sleeps and keeps me forever in his care. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
This is dreeeammmyyy.. |
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MERCURY Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 190Ireland |
Sighs of contentment surround me Great line. Wonderful imagery - Great stuff. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kethry...there is such a comforting and peaceful feel to this. So beautfully penned...I truly enjoyed. Hugs, ~Vicky If you judge people, you have no time to love them. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A beautiful, soothing write... a treasure found when I was unable to sleep. *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A lovely poem to end my day with. Sweet dreams...I know I now will. EA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
KethryLove~ The anniversary of this day turns memories in abide When in New Poet Richey friends stood side by side~ Laughter rang across the bay with friends-in-gather on that day ... tenderly etched with this heart for all of time will never depart~ Bond of friendship circled wide tending friendships of gentle abide~ Dang it ... I'm just all sentimental remembering~ Love you my friend ... and miss you~ Now ... your poem - 'knowing salted kisses, as the king holds me in his arms' I simply LOVE the thought of this~ Beautifully done sweet poetess~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
It took a special touch to write this poem, to make it a beautiful thing and not the dark reverie it so easily could have been. You made it happen. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am searching for that contentment...you write as I someday wish to... hugss Keth Maureen |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hi Kethry. Just read your poem...and the responses you got. FIRST - I would like to say I love it. SECONDLY - I suppose it is true everyone can read something different into the written word. The others see peace and contentment. I saw the words Posidean and Davy Jones and salty lips. In my eyes I see a person who wanted to drown. Not trying to be morbid...just thought you'd like to know what this piece gave to me. I really do like it. Thanks. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved heart I absolutely love your use of language in this. The softly enfolding comfort of the deep sea, that snug blanket of silence that wraps around like a shroud, you couldn’t have put it better. Do I love this? You know I do, it is I think so evocative in its speech pattern of the flow of water. As for what the message is I know what I read in it, I’m sure others can see different hidden depths. I particularly love the Davy Jones reference, I always loved that pirate sea shanty. You are an amazingly gifted writer and forever Mushy Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds but I can face the future with courage brave and bold Footprints In My Heart Kethry [This message has been edited by Marsha (09-12-2003 08:38 PM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kaoru, Thank you - it felt rapturous writing it. MERCURY, I'm glad you like the images - it means some of what was in my head transferred to paper. viraynes, I guess when I think about it, I intended peaceful. suthern, definitely a treasure *wink Earth Angel, your affinity for things earthy is showing. Dream on. Marge, you are as precious to me as the day we met. Thank you for the gift of your words. James, Thank you for seeing beyond the moment to the intention nakdthoughts, lovey - maybe not exactly that type of contentment, something similar would work better. Evocative Verse2, Not necessarily WANTED to, but more embracing the inevitable. Thanks for seeing the depths of this. *Grin Marsha beloved, you always plumb the depths of my work. Thank you. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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